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The happiness ratings for both: single people and those in relationsip, and the effect of children


dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Sep 2, 2016   #1
The charts below show the result of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the U.S, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevances.


The charts provide information about general feeling in different ages. The first chart compares people happiness between single and wedded individuals. The second chart looks at factor that people think they might be happy because of it. Overall, married people are happier than unmarried people. In addition, children factors are not related with their happiness.

According to the data, married people have higher percentage of happiness around 40 percent than unmarried person around 20 percent. However, from the age gap between them, they have stable percentage. Special case come from unmarried people at the range age 65 and over. They get the highest score at 34 percent.

On the other hand, the second chart shows that there are no relation for married people to have children or not with their happiness. The data tell that no matter how old their children are, their happiness remain stable above 40 percent.


  • Married and unmarried people

ramzi06 9 / 17 4  
Sep 2, 2016   #2
Greetings Mrs Atika Dinartika
I am pleased reading your writing IELTS Task 1. but still some errors have been detected in here. let me help you to figure it out and share some advice.

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