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IELTS: What is the most happy age between teenage and adult. Discuss both views.


zigolf 2 / 3 1  
Nov 6, 2014   #1
Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A popular topic talked about by people in all walks of life is which is the most enjoyable age. Some people say that it is school life whereas others prefer mature life. This essay will discuss both of these responses. However, in my opinion, adult age outweigh adolescent age.

Regarding the young age, clearly its advantages come mainly from the low degree of responsibilities. First, people in this range do not work. As a result, they are far from being stressed out. Take daily life as an example, they arrive at homes from schools early leading to have a great amount of leisure time, unlike adults who tend to have short rest time because of work. In addition, due to their parent's support, these juveniles have only few things to be concerned about. To illustrate, when they get ill, they could stay on beds, because their parents will look after them. Therefore, they are likely to have a great number of pleasant days.

On the other hand, although they are responsible for a variety of tasks, people in working age have two major benefits. Obviously, they earn money for themselves causing them to be able to afford more favorite items. A good example is expensive toys which could not be had in the past because parents though they were extravagant. They can buy it easily when they work. Similarly, adults are likely to be independent from any ones, particularly parents. Thus, they can do what they are keen on without limitations. For instance, sport lovers can come home very late in order to do exercise for long hours. This situation would be difficult to happen if they were children.

To conclude, it is unfair to claim any side as a totally correct answer, because this is a subjective question. However, I missed several things in the past resulting from my parent's strictness. Hence, I prefer mature time to teenager's.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 6, 2014   #2
A popular topic talked about by people in all walks of life is which is the most enjoyable age. Some people say that it is school life whereas others prefer mature life. This essay will discuss both of these responses. However, in my opinion, adult age outweigh adolescent age.

- Chawapon, this is a good introductory statement. However, you left the last sentence hanging because you failed to present an overview of your personal opinion on the matter. Remember, the introduction is an overview of the discussion that will be following so try to be complete when presenting the topics for discussion.

I will be restating your paragraphs for you in order to show you a more accurate way of discussing the topic of the paragraph.

Regarding the young age, clearly its advantages come mainly from the low degree of responsibilities. First, people in this range do not work. As a result, they are far from being stressed out. Take daily life as an example, they arrive at homes from schools early leading to have a great amount of leisure time, unlike adults who tend to have short rest time because of work. In addition, due to their parent's support, these juveniles have only few things to be concerned about. To illustrate, when they get ill, they could stay on beds, because their parents will look after them. Therefore, they are likely to have a great number of pleasant days.

- Some people believe that the youth enjoy their young lives or ages because they have no responsibilities in life other than school. There is less at stake for the youth because their parents do most of the worrying about the day to day life decisions for the family, hence the less stressful life. Adults on the other hand need to worry about day to day things like budgeting their income, working to earn money, and delivering on work responsibilities.

- Chawapon, there is a flaw in your discussion because the life of a teenager is not stress free. It is filled with worry about passing school marks, peer pressure, and deciding upon what they want to be in the future. So you can instead discuss this from a lesser stress degree than adults. Definitely not from the stress free stand point.

On the other hand, although they are responsible for a variety of tasks, people in working age have two major benefits. Obviously, they earn money for themselves causing them to be able to afford more favorite items. A good example is expensive toys which could not be had in the past because parents though they were extravagant. They can buy it easily when they work. Similarly, adults are likely to be independent from any ones, particularly parents. Thus, they can do what they are keen on without limitations. For instance, sport lovers can come home very late in order to do exercise for long hours. This situation would be difficult to happen if they were children.

- Adults are perceived to have more fun in their lives though because of their freedom to earn and lack of curfew at home. Adults are independent of their parents and thus, are allowed to make their own decisions regardless of the consequences. They are responsible enough to take charge of their lives and their problems, thus with more freedom to dictate their own lives, they also find more freedom and happiness.

- Chawapon, Don't forget that teenagers also have tasks that they are responsible and accountable for with their parents. These may be small tasks but they are still character building and allow the kids to develop their sense of responsibility and freedom as adults.So again, you have a flawed line of reasoning in this paragraph.

Now, where is your point of view on the given topic? You were supposed to discuss your opinion on the matter aside from the two sides of the issue that were previously provided. You need to add that in order to complete the essay. Your conclusion is not only incomplete, but it tried to present a new idea towards the end of the essay. You know very well that essay conclusions cannot include a new idea. Revise the conclusion to include only the requirements which are a restated prompt, summary of the information, and re-emphasizing your opinion on the topic.
softball16 2 / 16 4  
Nov 7, 2014   #3
I feel your essay lacks a lot of important information. I don't know if there is a word limit but it seems kind of rushed. Take your time in thoroughly explaining each aspect of this essay. Provide the reader with more compelling and more scenarios, I guess you can say, to intrigue your reader. If there is a word limit then within that limit try to add the most essential information you can find. In regard of your opinion, make sure that you also explain that, its important for your reader to know what you think after providing them with this two side spectrum. With that in mind, make sure in your opinion you also explain why thats your opinion.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Nov 7, 2014   #4
Well, you are of good writing. However, I see that you failed to present what the prompt is asking. To justify what I am saying, a closer look at the question:

Opinion 1: Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives.
Opinion 2: Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.
Task 1: Discuss both these views (You are asking to discuss both opinions according to happiness)
Task 2: give your own opinion. (Then, you are to show your arguments retrieved from the scientific facts as to support your main topics)

However, in my opinion, adult age outweigh adolescent age.

This is not all about the age, but how those people in different ages glow with happiness
ali27 2 / 2  
Dec 2, 2014   #5
A popular topic talked about by people in all walks of life is which is the most enjoyable age. Some people say that it is school life whereas others prefer mature life. This essay will discuss both of these responses. However, in my opinion, adult age outweigh adolescent age.

It is always struggle among people which period of life is the best. In childhood period, children think being an adult could give them more Independence whereas adults thinks school ages is best ages because their own unique responsibility is studying. This essay would prob in this issue and evaluate each period of life priority.

Regarding the young age, clearly its advantages come mainly from the low degree of responsibilities. First, people in this range do not work. As a result, they are far from being stressed out. Take daily life as an example, they arrive at homes from schools early leading to have a great amount of leisure time, unlike adults who tend to have short rest time because of work. In addition, due to their parent's support, these juveniles have only few things to be concerned about. To illustrate, when they get ill, they could stay on beds, because their parents will look after them. Therefore, they are likely to have a great number of pleasant days.

Regarding the in young age, clearly its advantages come mainly from the low degree of responsibilities.Main advantages of younger age is lack of responsibility . Firstly , people in this rangethey do not need to work. As a result, they are far from being stressed out. Take daily life is as an example, they arrive at homes from schools early leading to have a great amount of leisure time,.unlikewhereas adults who tend to have short rest time because of their jobs typ e . In addition, due to their parent's support, juveniles have only few things to be concerned about are less. To illustrate, when they get ill, they could stay on beds, because and their parents will look after them. Therefore, they are likely to have a great number of pleasant days.


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