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Why We Happy? A proper job brings joy and excitement in human life


mujahid_fadli 16 / 3 6  
Oct 7, 2015   #1
Some people say that in order to be happy, you must have a job you love doing. Others say that others factors are more important.

Do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job really enjoy?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


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While a greatest number of individuals say that having nice occupation is the best way to be happier, I would argue with others who assume that there are factors which are similarly predominant in human beings.

At least, there are two reasons why occupation provides feels glad and excite in human life. Firstly, if they have a proper job, they can fulfill all needs of their family. For example, those could take a Christmas or New Year's holiday in Europe and other famous tourist destination. Also, if they working accordance with their passion. It is occur with the owners or founders a sort of company. He come work every day with joy and confidence for success in the future. Therefore, because of his perseverance, he would gain financial security that might his life satisfied with happiness.

On the other hand, I believe it is not solely job that makes person can be happy in their life. Every individual was born and raised with different values and experiences. Thus, researchers should measure the happiness with many instruments and variable because this is not always the same perspective as with every individuals and places. In general, there are some factors that human can be happy. To begin, spending time with family and friends would trigger a sense of happiness. Secondly, spend life time with something that is really useful to themselves and many people also make those happy. Finally, happiness is something that relate closely with the spiritual life. For exemplify, the leaders of the major religions are the one of the happy people in the whole world. According to them, bring people to the salvation is the priceless work.

To conclude, do the job that human enjoy is a factor which could make them happy. Not only this, I firmly believe that many factors are probably much more predominant and it's variant for every people such as dedicate to religion and establish a happy family.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Oct 7, 2015   #2
Hi Mujahid :-) For starters, let me tell you that the way you restated the prompt was quite good. It was nice to see that you can actually do it within one single sentence. That said, there is a drawback to such type of statements. The main drawback being that you are supposed to have a standard of 3 sentences in the introduction. You can lose points for not following the correct format in writing the paper so please, keep the minimum 3 sentence criteria per paragraph in mind.

That said, your overall discussion is acceptable and offers some pretty valid points that gives the reader an opportunity to consider your statements in relation to their own beliefs. When a paragraph is successfully structured that way, as you did, it creates a sense of logic in the method of thinking in the writer. A plus for you when the examiner reads your paper.

So, you have the structure and content of the paper down pat. All you have to resolve now are the grammar issues. Let me offer you a look at the necessary corrections in your paper.

say that having A nice occupation is the best way to be happier HAPPY

I would argue with others who assume that there are factors which are similarly predominant in human beings.

At least, there are two reasons why AN occupation provides EXCITEMENT AND HAPPINESS feels glad and excite in human life.

fulfill all THE needs of their family.

famous tourist destinationS

Also, if they working IN accordance with their passion.

It is occur with the owners or founders a sort of company. = Not everyone can work as a business owner but they can still be happy with their work. So do not be this specific.

He comes HOME FROM work every day with joy and confidence for success in the future.

that might FILL his life WITH satisfied SATISFACTION with AND happiness

I believe it is not solely A job that makes A person can be happy in their life

Every individual was IS born and raised with different values and experiences

Thus, researchers should measure the happiness with many instruments and variableS because this IT is not always the same perspective as with every individuals and places.

there are some factors that CAN MAKE A HUMAN human can be happy.

Secondly, spend life time with something SPENDING TIME DOING SOMETHING that is really useful to themselves and many people also make those PEOPLE happy.

For exemplify, EXAMPLE,

are the one of the happy SOME OF THE HAPPIEST people in the whole world

bringING people

is the priceless work.

do the job that human enjoy is a factor which could make them happy. DOING A JOB THAT A PERSON ENJOYS IS PART OF HIS HAPPINESS IN LIFE.

BUT I firmly believe that many factors are probably much more predominant and it's variant IT VARIES for every people such as THOSE dedicateD to religion and establishING a happy family.


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