Write an article in about 200 words on the topic "I want to become a..."
What I want to become, it's the hardest question for a teenage boy or girl, it's to choose a single career out of million, it's just like selecting a tiny droplet out of a big ocean. From begining as a child till the maturity a person thinks of many different things that he or she might want to become, but suddenly in teenagehood lands the splitted ways infront where you have to make a single choice and leave the other behind. As for me, the same condition arose, but with the help of my parents I was able to determine what I wanted to choose, I chose biology subjects, as I reached to the conclusion that I want to become a doctor. It was my dream from the begining to become someone who would be able to serve the nation, help the poor and needy somehow, and I chose to be a doctor to fulfil my dream. I don't wish to become the wealthiest or the most highly graduated doctor of the world, but I do want to become the one who will serve her people and country in a true manner. I want to become a loyal doctor not only to the patients but also to the needy one's. Basically the summit that I want to reach is to become a good person first and then a doctor.
I am new here, I do request you all to check my article and tell me my mistakes and also inform me if I should add something or even delete something. Thanks.
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From begining as a child till
It was my dream from the begining to become
It should be beginning not begining.
suddenly in teenagehood lands the splitted ways infront where
I would look for another word instead of splitted. It just doesn't sound right to me.
Infront should have a space in between like in front.
"but with the help of my parents I was able to determine what I wanted to choose, I chose biology "parent's help irks me I think sentence could be more nice like this I love my parent very much who are always my source of inspiration, under their guidance I decided to choose Biology.
The sentences are not structured very well, I also think you mention your profession first then talk about your parent and how your parent gave the direction to enter in your doctor's profession.There is lot to say about this excellent profession with lot of excellent examples how you were attracted seeing them in society.
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First of all, you should enter the name of the university you are applying to and explain on short how it will help you to fullfill your dream.
I recommend that, you should delete, it's just like selecting a tiny droplet out of a big ocean , because it does not make a proper sense as picking a droplet from an ocean is a simple job which can be done with the help of a dropper.
