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Having fewer languages is a good thing?


hkahal 1 / 3 1  
Oct 2, 2013   #1
Essay topic:
Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The shrinking world witness to eradicate of some languages. Although some people believe that it leads life to be easier rather than before, I believe this phenomenon is no welcome event and local languages should be rescued.

Language is a cultural and historical heritage for each nation. Any language is conveying and carrying by itself its own people's customs and culture. Getting rid of such the richness source would deprive scholars to access to part of humankind background. In addition, Linguistic and ethnic diversity as a sign of cultural richness is an advantage for countries to attract tourists. Based on these reasons, I believe that the local or ethnic language which are exposed of expiration should be rescued.

Furthermore, by using of official and international languages, role of local languages has been decelerated. People have to know a common language to interact with the other nations as if to exist of ethnic languages have no impact on their official or international communications. On other hand, People prefer using their native language to contact with their peer rather than use the official language. A good case in point is growth of native language campaigns around the worth to defend of right of native language. Based on these reasons, I believe that the fewer language necessarily would not lead to an easier life.

In conclusion, I disagree with someone who believes more eradication of language brings about comfortable for us. I believe than linguistic diversity is a cultural heritage which should be supported.

Pahan 1 / 2,029 553  
Oct 2, 2013   #2
The shrinking world witness to eradicate of some languages.

... I guess what you mean by shrinking world is that it becoming a global village. But that phrase is not so clear and at the first glance the reader may not capture what you mean. I suggest you to use a more familiar phrase to talk about that idea.

Although some people believe that it leads life to be easier rather than before, I believe this phenomenon is no welcome event and local languages should be rescued.

Now, what's the connection between easier life and language extinction. I don't see them having a direct relationship :(
OP hkahal 1 / 3 1  
Oct 2, 2013   #3
Thank you for your kindness. Is it possible to let me know more about the bodies?
dumi 1 / 7,203 1592  
Oct 10, 2013   #4
This is your first body paragraph. Here you need to defend your opinion that you expressed in the introduction by giving reasons and supporting those reasons with examples. (I prefer if you limit the number of reasons to one per para).... So what's the reason here? It is that language has a great bearing on one's cultural identity. Then you need to give an example to support this reason. For example;

Language is an integral part of one's culture. Therefore if a language would die, it would die together with its associated culture. This is not a healthy trend because culture has a great influence on one's value system, beliefs, identity and most importantly the personality . For example, if I cant speak my native language, I cannot enjoy a poem written in my own language. It means I get distanced from my own people and their love and affection because I would not be able to understand their feelings.
Pahan 1 / 2,029 553  
Oct 10, 2013   #5
Our globalized world witnesses to gradually eradicate of some indigenous languages. Although some people believe the world with fewer languages would be be easier toin communication than before, I disagree with them and believe local languages should be rescuedprotected .

.... very good :)
Our globalized world witnesses eradication of some indigenous languages. However, some people believe that the world with fewer languages would be easier in terms of communication. I disagree with them and firmly believe it is important to protect such endangered languages for several reasons.
OP hkahal 1 / 3 1  
Oct 10, 2013   #6
Thank you dear Pahan for your taking time, I would be very thankful if you could review my second body.
Pahan 1 / 2,029 553  
Oct 10, 2013   #7
Furthermore, by using of official and international languages, role of local languages has been decelerated.

... this is actually a reason how this extinction of languages do happen. But, your prompt is not asking you for that. It asks whether you agree or not on the argument stated above. So, here you go out of topic. Concentrate and give focus to what your prompt asks from you and align your writing with that. In this paragraph, you should give another reason to say why you disagree with that statement. Then support that reason with an example :)

Always ready to help you dear friend ;)
OP hkahal 1 / 3 1  
Oct 10, 2013   #8
Pahan

Furthermore, I disagree with the idea that the fewer languages provide easier conditions to communicate with the others. I believe the exist or lack of indigenous languages neither do related to our interactions nor our comfortable relations. Since our communication area are spirited from each other, People have to know a common language to interact with the other nations, and prefer using their native language to contact with their peer and their families. The growth of native language campaigns to defend the native language rights around the worth shows how people interested in protecting their native language.
Pahan 1 / 2,029 553  
Oct 11, 2013   #9
I believe the existence or lack of indigenous languages neither do related to our interactions nor our comfortable relations. Since our communication area are spirited from each other, People have to know a common language to interact with the other nations, and prefer using their native language to contact with their peer and their families.

.... this section does not convey your idea clearly. I cannot really get what you try to mean :(
I hope you re-phrase that part to improve clarity of your ideas. Also, make sure you have a specific example to support that reason. Examples help you convince the reader on your position in the argument.

The growth of native language campaigns to defend the native language rights around the worth shows how people interested in protecting their native language.

.... this too is very confusing to understand :( .... First try with simple sentence structure, one idea per one sentence.


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