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If we analysis the causes for the overweight , the first foremost reason will be the urban life style .
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For discussion I want to give an illustration how the change in life style has caused my friend more weight.
I think this unnecessary
My friend was good at sports, when he was active in sports he had good health and maintained his weight but for his higher education he quit practice sport for a long time.
better you seperate in two sentences
Firstly, we have to change our life style we should not concentrate only on work we should also spend time for exercise.
secondly, we
S capital
With all above measures, good habits and balance between work and personal life we can reduce over weight and have good health.
verb ?
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