I still hear my grandmother yelling at me asking me to stop playing on the streets

Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world. How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature?

I still hear my grandmother yelling at me asking me to stop playing on the streets and come inside to have a snack. I still smell the freshness in the air when we took vacations on hill sides. I can still feel the dampness under my feet when we played in the rain water. Does a modern day kid know any of these? I seriously doubt that.

Today, inorder to give a comfortable life for their children, both the parents work. They are busy running errands around and hardly have time for the kids. As a result (in other words, out of guilty feeling) they allow kids to do whatever they want to do - like watching TV, playing with their playstation or spending time on computer/tabs/smartphones. Children these days hardly spend time outside their homes.

I recently attended a birthday party. I saw children, in the age group of about 8-12yrs, with their smartphones. Most of them were either listening to music or chatting with their friends or playing games. Same thing happened when we were spending our vacation in Florida. Even in the beach, every member in the family were so engrossed in their cellphones and hardly spoke with each other. I was surprised to see them and at the same time felt bad to see how they have isolated themselves.

This raises a very important question, "Do our kids understand and appreciate nature?". I think today no one does. During summer holidays how many kids do we see in the streets playing? How many of them prefer beaches and mountains over xbox and movie theater? How many kids have taken nature trail or spent a day without any modern technologies? Result - diabetes at younger age, heart problems, obesity and mental problems to name a few.

I strongly feel it is the responsibility of parents to teach children to learn to understand and appreciate nature. This helps in maintaining good health and stable mind.

The essay that you wrote is very nice to read. However, it does not really answer the essay prompt. There was a failure on your part to explain the importance for today's children to understand and experience nature. The whole essay seems to be just an introduction to the topic and thus, lacks the substance that the response needs in order to be the effective. I suggest that you revise the essay. Instead of this lengthy discussion that doesn't really offer a response, hark back to the time you experienced nature because you played outdoors. Explain how that helped you become a better person and what that experience offered you in terms of social development. Then compare it to the way that modern children are enjoying their lives tied to their gadgets. Don't discuss just the health repercussions of their interest in gadgets. Explore further towards the lack of social skills development and the inability of children to entertain themselves sans gadgets. Those are but brief examples of how you can better respond to this essay prompt.

Thanks a lot for your comments. Very useful. When I reread my essay even I felt the same. I will add more explanations to support the topic.

Personally you should add some specific details.
You also should check the grammatical error after finishing your essay.
For example " inorder to give a comfortable life for their children ".