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krity 1 / 1  
Jan 27, 2014   #1
Computer

Computer is a very beautiful gift of science. Its make our life very easier. We can get various information from the computer. It is a data base system first we have to put information after that it will give you output as per your requirement. We cant imagine our life with out it .

Now a day's computer knowledge is necessary since it's an important part of our life. It became the primary source of education. Because of computer the world becomes very small and its possible to get connect with peoples to any part of the world in low cost. We are using it on our daily life for various purposes. In the computer there are so many feature if you are free and don't have anything to do than easily you can pass your time by using computer like we can chat with peoples by social sites, messengers, Purchase the products , paying the bills , search for new thing, movies, games, song, and etc.

There are also some disadvantages of the computer. When we are using computer we have to be very care full other wise it will very danger. If you are continuously using computer than it will not good for your health. Many of peoples keep safe their confidential information on it so, any thing happen and you don't have any backup then there may chances to loss your data or if any wrong person get that information they can simply misuse it .

In a conclusion we can say "there are 2 part of the coin" as we know computer also have some pros and cons. Its depend on person how they use it. If you use it by correct way than obviously you will be benefited other else may it harmful for you.

indah_hai 19 / 38 4  
Jan 28, 2014   #2
Hello Krity,
Here I write you some correction for your writing:
- Its make > it makes
- A data > data or the data
- Cant > cannot
- Because of computer > Because of computer,
- the world becomes very small > note: computer cannot make our world become small, maybe it could be changed to be "computer makes it easy to reach a long distance all around the world"

- by social sites, messengers, Purchase the products , paying the bills , search for new thing, movies, games, song, and etc. > by social sites, doing messengers, buying products, paying the bills, searching new things, watching movies, playing games, looking for songs, and etc.

Well done, Krity!
OP krity 1 / 1  
Jan 28, 2014   #3
Thanks you so much for you valuable reply....
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 28, 2014   #4
Its makeIt makes our life very easier.

We cant imagine our life with out it .

Today we cannot imagine our life without computers.

Now a day's computer knowledge is necessary since it's an important part of our life.

Nowadays, computer literacy is a must because it is an important life skill for one to be successful.

Because of computer the world becomes very small and its possible to get connect with peoples to any part of the world in low cost.

Actually it is the ICT (Information and Communication Technology) that has brought the world together and made it a small global village.
sabi123 1 / 1  
Jan 29, 2014   #5
Thanks krity since you suggested me this site ...
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jan 29, 2014   #6
care full

- careful is one word.

When we are using computer we have to be very care full other wise it will very danger. If you are continuously using computer than it will not good for your health.

Working at computers all day long may weaken your eye site.

Many of peoples keep safe their confidential information on it so, any thing happen and you don't have any backup then there may chances to loss your data or if any wrong person get that information they can simply misuse it .

This is not a disadvantage of computers. You need to have a proper backing up system. This is the same case with hard copies too and that's why people keep duplicate hard copies. However, you can talk about children's addiction to computer games, distancing of people's physical interactions etc. as its disadvantages.


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