Help to only our own community or nation, as it is not possible to help each and every one?

Prompt:-
We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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It is often believed by some that helping others should be restricted to one's own community or nation, as it is not possible to help each and every one. I completely disagree with this notion and I believe efforts should be made, to provide help to as many as possible.

On the one hand, I agree we always find people, around us, who are in need of help. Assisting them and providing help to them in any form would mean a world to them. These days, even the wealthiest nation have homeless people and any charity or volunteer work would benefit them a lot. For example, people in many countries donate their old clothes and other belongings to various homeless people or even to certain non-profit organizations. As the problems persist locally, I can understand why some people give more priority to local charity.

At the same time, I believe we shouldn't limit ourselves to the national borders. Today the world consists of many rich and poor nations and the richer nations should take a step forward by helping the impoverished lot. For example during various natural calamities, poorer nations could benefit a lot from the aid or help received by the richer nations. This would not only help them to recover, but will also help them in getting back to their feet.

In conclusion, the whole human race, first are citizens of planet Earth and then of any country. Thus, helping someone in need, shouldn't be differentiated on the basis of international borders.

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Thanks :)

To begin with, there is no doubt that citizens in one country have priorities to be assisted first when they are in need of help because accommodating its residents is a government's highest responsibility. Moreover, it is our nature to give aid to people closest to us because we understand these people's difficulties the most. We can't stand seeing other in misery. Therefore, many charities and non-profit organizations were found to benefit the homeless, the disabilities and so on. People in a country then donate their old clothes and other belongings to these organizations with the hope of bringing a better life to people around them.This is just some of my idea for your second paragraph, proofread it as you need to ^_^


This graph sounds nice; however, have you wondered why rich nations need to help other countries. You should add some critical thinking so that even a selfish country, after reading this, is willing to provide aid to other countries ^_^.


Ahh, actually no comment for your conclusion. It sounds quite abstract and unique to me. Maybe because I always follow my teacher rule: sum it up in your conclusion. You conclusion does not follow my teacher rule, and I am not sure how to edit this :v. So hope somebody would help you then.

Good luck.
When will be your IELTS exam :) Just a random question, no need to answer lol :3

Appreciate your feedback myngoc311. :) I liked the way you transformed the second paragraph and also the tips which you mentioned later.

Again Thank you for your comment.


My IELTS exam is on 14th of next month. Already gave one in December, got above 8 in each section except for writing(6.5) :( and I need 8 in all sections for my Visa. Lets see what happens this time :)