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Some high schools forced their students to do volunteer work in order to graduate. Give your opinion


ChauAnh2312 1 / -  
May 7, 2020   #1

Should volunteer work at school be compulsory?



In recent years, the question if students should do volunteer work in order to graduate has been receiving a great public attention. Although this trend is not without the advantages, the downsides will justify these.

There are several negative influences on students if they are forced to do volunteer. First, since students are already suffering enough pressure from school, volunteer work can make it worse with busy working schedules, leading to anxiety disorders of students. In fact, students should be encouraged to to spend their free time on leisure activities and sports with their friends and family, which can increased their work productivity at schools. Second, some students might be too centrate on volunteer work, which may lead to bad results at school that should be their main issues. This means that students could not have enough in- depth knowledge in order to graduate and get higher education, which affects their career opportunities in the future.

At the same time, society is not believed to gain anything from obliging young people to do unpaid work.First, forcing a group of people to do something against their will goes against the values of free and society. For instance, students would be stressed if they are obliged to do worrk they do not want and might have behaviour which are against society. Second, parents of student may think their child are being used which can lead to arguments in society.

Plenty of evidence suggest that volunteer work can be very good for students as long as young people are willing to do it, which turns out to be an ideal chance for students to improve social skills.

In conclusion, with the convincing argument mentioned above, volunteer work should not be compulsory for students to graduate.
RomanKoch 10 / 22 9  
May 7, 2020   #2
Although this trend is not without the advantages, the downsides will justify these From the essay I understand that you are against compulsory volunteering, but this sentence is confusing.

Anyways, the prompt asks for your opinion only, not advantages/disadvantages.
Maybe you could have just said in your second sentence - In my opinion, it is a bad idea in a more creative way than me, of course.

The second paragraph makes sense and supports your opinion against forceful volunteering. Despite some grammar mistakes, in my opinion, this paragraph is good.

The next paragraph is not so clear maybe you were in a rush while writing it.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,835 4783  
May 7, 2020   #3
I am uncertain as to what the actual, complete prompt for this essay is. There are actually several topics in relation to the subject of the essay so I cannot really decide which one is most applicable for your writing. Please provide the complete prompt requirements the next time you post an essay for review here. In the meantime, I will focus on your grammar issues. Just to get the ball rolling with regards to improving your writing skills.

Most of your errors relate to spelling and grammar issues. In one part of the essay, you repeated the word "to" twice in succession. You should remember to review your work before you submit your essay. So you can catch any errors made and correct it. Every mistake will result in point deductions. Remember that. If you get enough deductions, you could actually end up failing the test.

Let me get started with your spelling errors:

centrate = centered
worrk = work

Grammar rule issues:

- Verb form after the helping verb: ... which can increased (increase) their work...

These are some of the mistakes that I caught in your work. There are several more errors but I would have to show you a rewritten version of this essay to correct it. Sadly, I am not allowed to rewrite your whole essay for you just to correct the errors. I can give you better advice next time. Just remember to include the prompt so that I can do that for you.


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