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Higher crime rate over time makes several countries imposing fixed punishment to reduce that


Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Nov 6, 2016   #1
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should be always taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Now days, criminality is the crucial problem in most of country in universe. However, Fix punishment is the best way to reduce crime rate. Even thought, some people think that considering reason and circumstance of crime is the essential thing before judgement. This essay will discuss pros and cons about this notion.

First of all, rising crime rate by the time make several countries imposing certain punishment to reduce that. Fix punishment is believed making wary persons for doing criminal. It has been proven in some country that crime rate can be reduced. For example in Egypt, every murderer would like to get dead penalty, and cutting hand is the punishment for thief. Recent days, there is Indonesian worker in Egypt who got dead penalty causes killing her boss. This accident makes other people wary to do that. Consequently, homicides in Egypt are quite minim.

On the other hand, not all of crimes are committed on purposeful. Several people have certain reason why they do that. Saving their life and forcing are two of reasons which push them to do criminal. For example in Surabaya, the girl has killed her father owing to protect herself from her father who want to rape. However, the judges should find out more about her before judgement, and the judges cannot give her the same punishment with someone who committed premeditated murder.

All in all, crimes cannot be seen from one side to give judgement. However, Finding out more is the essential thing which should be done by the judges before judgement wing to give fairness.

Anna94 47 / 56 3  
Nov 6, 2016   #2
HELLO

Now days [nowadays or may say over time ], criminality is the ...
... best way to reduce [the] crime rate.
... and circumstance of crime is [are ] the essential ...

... by the time make[S ] several countries ...

... from her father who want[ED ] to rape [HER ].
... about her before judgement [judgment ], and the judges ...

GLUCK
IvanMS027 43 / 56 9  
Nov 7, 2016   #3
Hi Pram. Here are my suggestions for your essay.

Now daysnowadays , criminality is (...) of country in the worlduniverse . However, Fixfixeduse the participle punishment is the best way to reduce the crime rate. Even thought , some people ...

... murderer would like to get deaddeath penalty, and (...) punishment for the thief.
... worker in Egypt who got deaddeath penalty causesbecause of killing her boss.
... other people wary to do thatof doing that .

Several people have the certain reason ...
For example in Surabaya, the girl has killed her father (...) her father who wants to rape her .

I hope it can be useful for you.
Goodluck and Keep Spirited
mardian24 46 / 75  
Nov 7, 2016   #4
... that considering about reason and circumstance of crime are the essential thing before make a judgement.
be careful with verb that you use in your sentence

First of all, increasing of crime rate generate several countries (...) to reduce this issue .

Fixed punishment is believed making that people wary persons for doing criminal.

4. It has been proven in some country that crime rate can be reduced.
It has been proven in several countries that crime rate ...

5. All in all, crimes cannot be seen from ...
I think in your conclusion you must add about your opinion about this issue


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