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Toefl Essay - Historical building or new building


sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 21, 2014   #1
SHOULD A CITY TRY TO PRESERVE ITS OLD, HISTORIC BUILDINGS OR DESTROY THEM AND REPLACE THEM WITH MODERN BUILDINGS? USE SPECIFIC REASONS AND EXAMPLES TO SUPPORT YOUR OPINION.

Development in any field indicates sign of progress. Similarly infrastructure of city improves with the development of new buildings and premises. However many argue to retain the old buildings due to its historical importance. It is incomprehensible whether to remove historical buildings by building new ones as both have their distinct benefits and importance. In my opinion, it is better for cities to build new buildings to cop up with the rapidly evolving world.

Firstly, constructing new building would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns would be used. For instance Dubai, a well-developed city of opportunities has recently completed construction of World's biggest mall; it has more than 1800 stores to facilitate citizens and visitors, that offer's versatile collection of clothing and International brands. Many restaurants and saloons are also included in the directory of mall. Moreover, it has become must visit place of Dubai for the tourists due to its exquisite features and having its name in Genius book of the world.

Secondly, new building would require low maintenance but provide ancillary facilities require by building owners such as parking, Lifts and escalators rather than staircases. It would also help many international companies to build their offices in the city that would enhance businesses and employment opportunities. Government would earn more revenue due to industrial and corporate developments. Adding to it, residence would get options of purchasing modern and fancy houses. New buildings would have enough parking spaces that will discourage people to park anywhere in the city.

Historical buildings have different aesthetic value but they are difficult to maintain. Also it would require healthy sum of money periodically. On the other hand, new buildings would have all numerous hi tech facilities at the cost of less efforts and resources to maintain it.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Mar 22, 2014   #2
Development in any field indicates sign of progress.

This is a poor hook :( What does it try to tell the reader? You need to open your essay with an interesting , catchy sentence ( of course it needs to be relevant to your topic too) that can grab the reader's attention to your writing. If you have an issue with writing a good hook, just avoid it and start with introducing the background of your issue. I don't think it can have a big damage on your score card :D

However, the rest is fine and you follow a good structure for intro :)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 23, 2014   #3
Firstly, constructing new buildings would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns would be usedmore focused to cater current demands. For instance Dubai, a well-developed modern city that acts as a commercial hub for the region where many people do shopping,of opportunities has recently completed construction of World's biggest mall; it has more than 1800 stores to facilitate citizens and visitors, that offer's versatile collection of clothing and International brands. Many restaurants and saloons are also included in the directory of mall.


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