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The history of England Conquest


PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
In the 11th century, England had responsible twice invasions which changed the nation. This country has more adequately invader. It defeated two conquests in the site only 50 years which impact on culture, politics, law and language because Danish conquest in 1016.

After thirty years, all area surrounded by Scandinavian overhand by England. Denmark people ruled belong Svein while Cnut and an England kingdom separated between King Elthered and his young prince Edmund. Over time England has not be able to maintain among 6 months of class against Cnut's armies whereas it did not have planned final victory for Cnuts at Essex in eightieth century. Soon after after Edmund passed away six weeks later, Danish-Norman dynasty become formed.

The last story, even Cnuts has not the first Danish King in the UK but he founded more less impact in the English kings. Further his generations were responsible by the epochal situation of year 1066 become history and collective memory in England people.
Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 43  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hello PHA2016
i have an advice to you

all area(s) surrounded by Scandinavian ...
...you shoud s in area, because there are all before area
Fitri12 28 / 53 6  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Hi Pha, the followings are my humble comments

In the 11th century, England had responsible twice invasions which changed the nation. (this sentence is confusing, what is your objective?)

Please pay attention to the meaning of your sentences and flow of your paragraphs.

After thirty years, all area surrounded by ... ( maybe you want to say: After thirty years, all area(s) surrounded by Scandinavian (passive: were overhanded) by England)

Thank you.


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