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IELTS WRITING TASK 2_HISTORY OF A HOUSE THAT PEOPLE LIVE IN


Samt Lee 3 / 6 2  
Jun 27, 2021   #1

Every house has its own story



IN SOME COUNTRIES, MORE AND MORE PEOPLE ARE BECOMING INTERESTED IN FINDING OUT ABOUT THE HISTORY OF THE HOUSE OR BUILDING THEY LIVE IN

WHAT ARE REASONS FOR THIS?

HOW CAN PEOPLE RESEARCH THIS?


There was a common assumption that residents are considering a host of backgrounds belonging to the previous occurrences that happened to the house or department they live in. Whilst there are various reasons for this situation, I have a strong conviction that peoples are concerning about the safety issue. Apparently, the owners have hundreds of ways to find out this topic to fulfill their curiosity as well as their personal purposes by asking the seller or just simply searching on the internet.

The main reason for this interest is that peoples worry about their safety. As we know, the life standard is improving significantly due to the development of technology and human's demand. In this regard, peoples have more choices and opportunities to choose a perfect house for them and their families as well. In most cases, the owners do not want to buy a house that have a bad history such as accidents or safety system problems for example. Knowing more about the condition and prior events somehow benefits buyers with wiser options. Additionally, a better knowledge about the place that we will properly settle down for a long time is never be an awful thinking. In fact, almost every customers ask carefully for the full information of the house or department that they intend to buy and try to avoid ones that occurred nasty things in the past.

From a personal perspective, I firmly believe that peoples can easily look for detail instructionS about the history of their houses. In the most convenient way, we can ask the previous owners or the agencies that sell us the apartment, they must be well-known about the place and they have the responsibility to tell us the truth if they want to sell the house quickly and trustworthily. In other hand, websites on the internet also a beneficial method to search for the information as well as find out some reviews about houses, especially apartments and buildings. In this case, peoples are enabled to access into building's website to know more about them. Furthermore, joining some house's groups may provide essential history about places and events that happened in the past of the building. For example, before deciding to buy a house in district two in Ho Chi Minh city, my family considered carefully the origins of the house from my uncle and the seller.

To sum up, having a flawless accommodation require a number of factors. Society are spending more conscious thinking about the historical issues of houses they dwell in due to their own safety. According to this, we now can connect to diversionary sources to find out the facts that we want to know such as asking other people and surfing social networking sites for further relevant data.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4770  
Jun 28, 2021   #2
A 460 word essay cannot be written within a 40 minute time frame. The essay is overwritten and misuses English vocabulary quite often. An error often found in wordy essays. A failing essay always stems from an over-discussion. Writers who focus on producing long essays are only concerned with their vocabulary score. Not the LR, C + C, or GRA passing considerations. This essay is one of those essay types.

LR issues abound throughout the article that it would be impossible for me to pick all of these out for correction. I will however, point one out. A department is a section in a workplace. An apartment is a rented dwelling. In terms of GRA errors, one of the areas you should review in writing rules would be the way of writing plural words (people is already the plural of the same word. ) The writer does not consider word usage accuracy/ applicability in his writing.

The writer shows a clear understanding of the topic and writing guidelines. Sadly, his over-eagerness to show off his vocabulary skills made the essay recieve deductions over- all. This is too bad because a 300 word essay, targeting all the scoring criteria would have gotten him an excellent, if more than simply passing score.
OP Samt Lee 3 / 6 2  
Jun 29, 2021   #3
Thank you for your comment, I just want to ask you for more detail about the meaning of LR, C+C. Besides, I have read on some website that using peoples is considered to be more formal than people in an ielts essay so I learnt to use it.

This essay was too long, I will properly try to improve this issue in the next essay.


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