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History Intro paragraph: Do I properly state my argument? *Short*


pacers7ind 11 / 25 2  
Nov 26, 2012   #1
I'm trying to make a few points
1) Western European thought changed over time
2) It was changed by political, social, academic and scientific events.
3) It went away from religion and towards reason
Do I properly formulate a good intro with correct grammar?
Do I make my point across?

The quest for human knowledge throughout Western Europe demonstrates an evolution of ideas that were influenced by political, social and scientific advancements. The curiosity of the natural world facilitated the growth of ideas; these ideas evolved as the centuries progressed. The revival of ancient text facilitated the growth of knowledge. which would lead to an epistemology crisis. This crisis would direct philosophy to skepticism and doubt which would lead to the creation of philosophies based on reason and away from religious doctrines.
Malik Achakzai 3 / 12 3  
Nov 28, 2012   #2
Well you are having fine hints and a good paragraph just minor changes were needed, as rewritten below.

3) It went away from religion and towards reason

The curiosity of the natural world facilitated the growth of ideas; these ideas evolved as the centuries progressed.

Can be written: The curiosity of the natural world facilitated the growth of ideas; those ideas evolved as progress/product of centuries.

W hich would have lea d to an epistemology crisis.


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