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History is valuable or not. Discuss both views, give opinion



Lananh277 1 / -  
Sep 28, 2024   #1
Regarding the issue of history's significance, people hold different views. While it is argued that studying the past offers no value, I believe that history is strongly beneficial.
On the one hand, it is argued that learning about history does not benefit in any meaningful way, which is reasonable in certain aspects. Firstly, being knowledgeable in history is not as highly regarded in current job market demands. In an economy driven by practical skills, history is considered unaligned with a lucrative career path, as well as less valuable for employment opportunities. For example, trending fields such as finance or computer science require data analysis and soft skills rather than historical knowledge. Secondly, studying history is perhaps not enjoyable to a number of individuals. In the present day, people are captivated by the immediate and continuous satisfaction of social media. They are interested in news and information, such as TikTok short clips and Facebook newsfeeds, therefore history has decreased significance in some people's mental lives.
On the other hand, I would agree with those who believe that history brings such valuable insights. Firstly, history encourages people to improve from existing achievements rather than starting from scratch. For example, Nikola Tesla's modern alternating current (AC) electricity supply system, developed in 1887, remains the basis for today's most modern technological devices, including computers and smartphones. By studying his work, engineers are able to innovate and enhance these technologies more effectively, saving time and resources. Without historical knowledge, it could have taken longer to reach the advancements that human civilization has achieved to this day. Furthermore, history is intertwined with personal identity. For instance, in Vietnam, learning history about different occupations fosters a deeper understanding of the sacrifices made by previous generations. Such pieces of information enhance national pride in each person.
In conclusion, although it is argued that studying the past is a waste of time, I am firmly of the opinion that historical prominents bring several significant insights.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15224  
Sep 28, 2024   #2
Even as the essay is overwritten at 326 words, the response format presented for the discussion is incorrect. This will lead to a failing preliminary score because the expected response format was not used by the writer. A review of the prompt restatement will show that it is also incomplete. The correect restatement should profile both public opinions prior to the presentation of your personal opinion. The writer's opinion presented only shows the idea of the student, it lacks the supporting reasons presentation that would have completed the thesis statement and provide a summary of the upcoming reasoning paragraphs.

The lack of proper group and personal pronouns in the presentation of reasons also shows that the writer is not capable of differentiating between the public explanation, which is a required explanation for each paragraph, and his personal point of view pertaining to the given opinion, as the comparison point. As such, the examiner will be confused as to whose opinion is being presented and defended per paragraph. That is why the pronouns must be used when discussing the reasons. You cannot immediately jump to your personal opinion, without doing a comparison point of the 2 public perceptions.

Another problem is the summary conclusion. It must be presented with at least 40 words, covering 2 sentences at the least. the lack of proper formatting in the essay will be one of the main causes of the final failing score of this essay. Overall, this is not going to be an essay that will get a passing score in an actual test based on the shortcomings of the writer in this presentation.


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