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Hong Kong for mainland tourists - article


shing200584 10 / 1  
Mar 27, 2008   #1
Hello Sarah,

This is my ninth practice. I used a point of view of a travel magazine for Hong Kong readers to write this article so that you may feel strange. Anyway, please give me your sincere feedback again. Thanks in advance!

Question:
You are a reporter for a travel magazine which has just conducted a survey to collect opinions about Hong Kong from visiting mainland tourists. Write an article giving a broad outline of the survey results. You should report on the tourists' impressions of Hong Kong and Hong Kong people, including the negative as well as the positive aspects. Also suggest measures that can be taken by the Hong Kong Tourism Board to enhance Hong Kong's competitive edge as an attractive destination for mainland tourists.

Hong Kong for mainland tourists

Under Individual Visit Scheme, people from the mainland are easier and more convenient to visit Hong Kong. With more and more of Chinese provinces are involved in this scheme, mainland tourists have become one of the most important visitors that Hang Kong's tourist industry hinges on. Because of this, our magazine has conducted a survey, interviewed 1011 mainland tourists at several tour spots, to find out what are their feelings about Hong Kong and Hong Kong people. The following paragraphs will show you what the results tell us and what our Tourism Board can do to polish up our image as an attractive destination for mainland tourists.

First of all, mainland tourists especially like our harbor view. The risky On Ping 360, the world's smallest Disneyland, or the rather popular Ocean Park, are all defeated by Victory harbor. At night, the skyscrapers' beautiful lights, harmoniously combining with the special effects by green lasers, making an unforgettable view for the tourists, and truly convinced them that Hong Kong is a modern city.

What's more, Hong Kong is a shopping paradise for mainland tourists with a special reason. The selling of fake products is rampant in the mainland's marking. Mainland people lost their confidence in buying things in there, especially when they want to buy technologies, jewelry and health products, and prefer to buy them in Hong Kong instead. 'I believe in the efforts of the Hong Kong tourism Board which assure that we can buy genuine products' said one of the respondents. He also cited the easy way to indentify which shops are more trustful, although they have little information of it, was by checking whether there is a 'confidence label' stuck on the glass of shops' front door.

Additionally, mainland tourist thought that Hong Kong people are civilized. Some of the visitors expressed that they seldom queue for a bus, follow traffic lights, and sometimes litter in their own town, but they did not see these things happen in Hong Kong and found it good to follow the lifestyle.

However, some mainland tourists expressed their disappointment about Hong Kong's environment. The tourists found that the roads in Hong Kong are often busy, crowed, and full of exhausted fumes, which made them feel uncomfortable to breathe and deterred a few of them from visiting our city again.

Also, mainland tourists found it hard to communicate with the local people. They expected that it would not be difficult to ask some locals for directions in Putonghua. Unfortunately, the circumstance was the opposite. Some even thought that the shop staff in Hong Kong could only poorly use Putonghua to answer their questions.

To enhance our competitive edge as an attractive destination for Mainland tourists, there are some suggestions for the Hong Kong Tourism Board. Firstly, they should urge the government to adopt further measures to improve Hong Kong's air quality and promote greening in the community by conducting more research about damage of the problem has inflicted Hong Kong's tourism. Also, they should promote and subsidize the study of Putonghua for encouraging people better their Putonghua Language skills.

With the goodness of Hong Kong, it has already been an ideal place for Mainland tourists to visit. However, there is room for improvement. With the improvement, Mainland tourists would have a perfect experience of visiting Hong Kong.

EF_Team2 1 / 1,709  
Mar 28, 2008   #2
Greetings!

You've done a good job! Here are some editing tips:

Under Individual Visit Scheme, people from the mainland find it easier and more convenient to visit Hong Kong. With more and more Chinese provinces involved in this scheme, mainland tourists have become one of the most important visitors that Hong Kong's tourist industry hinges on. Because of this, our magazine has conducted a survey, interviewing 1011 mainland tourists at several tour spots, to find out their feelings about Hong Kong and Hong Kong people.

and truly convince them that Hong Kong is a modern city.

The selling of fake products is rampant in the mainland's marking. - Did you mean market?

Mainland people have lost their confidence in buying things there, especially when they want to buy technologies, jewelry and health products, and prefer to buy them in Hong Kong instead.

easy way to identify which shops are more trustworthy was by checking whether there is a 'confidence label' stuck on the glass of the shop's front door.

Additionally, mainland tourists thought that Hong Kong people are civilized.

roads in Hong Kong are often busy, crowded, and full of exhaust fumes, which makes breathing uncomfortable

conducting more research about the damage the problem has inflicted on Hong Kong's tourism. Also, they should promote and subsidize the study of Putonghua to encourage people to better their Putonghua Language skills.

With the improvement, mainland tourists would find visiting Hong Kong a perfect experience.

Good job!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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