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TOEFL; House OR Business? I would purchase a house if I have money


marikoshka888 1 / 1  
Jun 3, 2012   #1
You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.

money takes very important part of our everyday life. It is easy to spend it but make money is too difficult, so when we have enough money to invest, we should be very careful. it is not so easy to say what's better, purchase a house or business. before making decision, we should exactly estimate our possibility. purchase a house is easy and safe. there aren't risks of lose money. you can give it for rent and get some extra money from it or have it during some years and then sell out. but if we purchase business, we will have much more income. as for me, i would be purchase house. first of all I have not enough experience to manage business, other reason is that safety with low income is more acceptable for me then defectiveness risk with high income, fortiori if it is under question does it works or not.

all in all, making right choice always is very important and responsible, before making decision we should think hard, pragmatically, ask advice to competent people and then act cleverly, because we have one life, one chance and if we make mistake, the second chance possibly won't be.

ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 4, 2012   #2
It is easy to spend it but makeing money is too difficult,
say what'swhich one is better,
we should exactly estimate ourthe possibilitiesyand various facets of the issue
there aren't risks of losinge money
then sell it out
if we purchase a business

but if we purchase business, we will have much more income

when I read this sentence, I though You are going to say that you prefer business rather than house. I think this part should be revised. For example you could say :"Although setting a business may provide more income, but I prefer to have a house rather than a business."

Regards
Ahmad


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