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-ThanksMore houses are needed in many countries to cope with increasing populations. Would it be better to build houses in existing towns and cities, or to develop new towns in rural areas?
There no doubt that over population has been a major concern in many countries. The trend is that many people are relocating to cities for better job opportunities and better life. As such, some people assert that it is wise to build more houses and apartments in the cities to accommodate everyone. In my view, it is better to develop new town in rural areas for better job opportunities and development.
The plausible reason why some people disaccord with this view is mainly because more space is needed to accommodate new migrants in urban areas. When these people migrate to cities it would be extremely difficult to find a place to stay as the place is already congested with existing people. In order to avoid this, more apartments and houses should be built in order to provide accommodation to the new ones.
The counter argument is that it would be wise to develop new towns in rural areas instead of building more houses. The reason is that building more towns in regional areas benefit the people by increasing the chance of new employment opportunities and develop new businesses. Evidently, a community is formed which widens the scope of economic development in these areas Apart from this, the congestion and the problem of over population in the cities can be avoided to a certain extent.
If we look at both sides of the argument, developing new town in rural regions have more positive outcome rather than building more houses and apartments in the existing developed cities. It is hoped that more people will migrate to rural regions and increase the scope of development