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Housing and economic. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant


Killua 5 / 10 2  
Oct 9, 2016   #1
If it possible,could you help me to correct my essay?Thank you very much.

The given graph shows variation of the growing rate of the economic between 1995 and 2010.The pie charts give information about the proportion of household spending.Seen together,there seems to be a link between the two tiems.

It can be seen from the line graph that the growth of economic began at nearly 0.2 percent in 1995 and then fluctuated around 1 to 2 percent during the seven-year intervals.Follwing the fluctuation,it trended up dramatically and climbed to the top point at roughly 4 per cent.However,It had fallen sharply after the peaking and bottomed out nearly -5 per cent in 2008.Since then it had recovered and reached back to 0.2 per cent.

Over the same period,the pie charts of household expense shows some features related with the economic growth.The spending on housing and food made up the main parts of the total in all the four individual pies;the two shared the least in 2000 and 2005,respectively.Compared with the essential cost for living,the expenditure of clothing,entertainment,and travel,made up three moderate parts over the time;the sum of them increased in 2005 during the economic growing period.Then the expense of the three cut from nearly 1/4 in 2005 to less than 1/4 in 2010.


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fauzankrn 16 / 23 3  
Oct 10, 2016   #2
Hello Killua,
Here some inputs for you.

The givenline graph shows (...) of the economic during a 15-year period between 1995 and 2010. The pie charts give information about ... Seen together, there seems to be a link between the twotiems.itemsOverall it can be clearly seen that the highest point of ...

In any case, the majority household expense was for housing.[/i] better if you write an overview by more specific and focus on the outstanding trends

.FollwingFollowing the fluctuation,(...) point at roughly 4 per centpercent.

... charts of household expense shows some features ...

Good Luck!
OP Killua 5 / 10 2  
Oct 10, 2016   #3
Thank you for your corrections!Actually I couldn't find many relation between the two charts so I had to write more details about both of them.


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