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Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences


william731 18 / 43 13  
Sep 24, 2014   #1
Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government actions can solve this problem.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?


With the increasing number of people migrating to big cities, the house shortage of metropolis has become a serious social problem. Some people suggest that the housing problem solely can be solved by the government. Personally, I totally agree with this claim as will now be discussed.

Undoubtedly, government has the ultimate decision on city planning. Government has the power to demolish old and dangerous buildings aiming to release more sites to construct residential buildings. The city council can also implement plans to develop surrounding regions of the big cities and encourage residents to move to those areas by offering them allowance.

Secondly, it is the responsibility of local authority to help its disadvantaged citizens and provide shelters for them. Disable people, low income families and single parents are struggled to afford commercial real estate. The government has a duty to ensure and maintain its residents a certain degree of living standard and welfare. Therefore, it is believed that government should providing aids to assist these people by providing them financial aids and public accommodations.

The market price of the house in most of the big cities has been manipulated by local and foreign investors which is evident by the dramatically rising in house prices. In consequence, more and more people cannot bear the costs of purchasing commercial houses and they shift to seek for public housing. However, this behaviour imposes a pressure to the supply of public housing. Therefore, governmental intervention in the market price should be in place in order to discourage investors from purchasing houses for non-residential purpose.

To conclude, accommodation is one of the fundamental desires of human beings. Government has an essential role to facilitate the searching of shelter of their citizens by alleviating the pressure of house shortage.

vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 24, 2014   #2
William, some suggestions for better paragraph construction and comments regarding your content are listed below. I hope you find it helpful :-)

With the increasing number of people migrating to big cities, the house shortage of metropolis has become a serious social problem. Some people suggest that the housing problem solely can be solved by the government . Personally, I totally agree with this claim as will now be discussed.

- With an increasing number of... the housing shortage in the metropolis... people suggest that the housing problem solutionis solely the government's responsibility .I believe that there is merit to this claim for a number of reasons that I will be discussing below.

- This makes it very clear that only your opinion and no other will be discussed in the paper.

Undoubtedly, government ...

- The government is in charge of city planning. Therefore, they have the power to demolish old building in favor of constructing new residential buildings s or re-purpose abandoned government owned buildings for purposes of providing housing and shelter to those who need it. The city council has been empowered to implement housing plans in their area that will encourage some homeless people to move there because of the government allowance offered for them to start their lives in a a new place.

Secondly, it is the responsibility of local authority..

- As tax paying people we should demand that the government provide for us using the funds we helped finance. It is the job of the government to take care of us when we are down on our luck financially. This means providing us with shelter when we cannot afford to rent or buy our own. It is the government's responsibility to provide residential assistance to the people of the city by providing public accommodations or financial aid whenever possible.

- The government cannot and should not intervene in the free market housing projects / private residential developers. Don't use this argument. Your first two are strong and compelling enough to stand on its own in the paper.

To conclude, accommodation is one of the fundamental desires of human beings.

- Based upon my aforementioned reasons ranging from the power of the government to manipulate building use and their responsibility to the people based upon taxes collected, it becomes very clear that the government truly has the sole power and responsibility when it comes to addressing and solving the housing shortage in the metropolis.


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