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human should esteem and value their pets like family members


lcpan913 2 / 3  
Feb 22, 2013   #1
Nowadays, many people like to raise many kind of pets, one of common example are a dogs or cats. Raising pets require more time, love, and money to care them and build relationship. Therefore, I believe that pets should be treated like family members, there are three reasons to support my opinion.

First reason is that animals were living in the wild, they became pets because human caught and raised them, it behavior change the animal's way of life and their ability of living, so that human have responsibility to take care them like a family members, looking after their everything. But pets are different form human that mean they can't go to work, to meet other friends, to study how to live in human community by themselves. It means their life almost only for human who is their family, so that it's important to pets that human treated them a family member.

A second reason is like first one, human raised pet for their enjoyment. Although some parts of pets are different from human, such communicational ways and behaviors, they still have their feelings, languages, and behaviors. Therefore, I think pets should be treated family member to live with human. At the same time, human should be esteem and understand their pets.

Third reason is that pets also can teach something to human. For example, children have communication with pets that they can learn other animal's behavior and how to stand with other animals. It's important for their growing up and understand human have to get along with other life.

Finally, I believe that pets should be treated like family members, and human should esteem and value their pets, because human are pet everything, without human care and raise, they can't live in human community very well and safe.
samalik 2 / 2  
Feb 22, 2013   #2
The organization of ideas is good, but you need to focus on the sentence structure.
Cheers :)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Feb 22, 2013   #3
Simple, but a Good introduction :)

First reason is that animals were living in the wild, they became pets because human caught and raised them, it behavior change the animal's way of life and their ability of living, so that human have responsibility to take care them like a family members, looking after their everything.

This is pretty too long.... that disturbs the flow of your ideas and makes the reader bored. Split this line into a few and then the flow would improve a lot

But pets are different form human that mean they can't go to work, to meet other friends, to study how to live in human community by themselves

This sounds a bit silly as an idea. I think you better stop at what you said previously. Better give a more specific example in its favor :)
OP lcpan913 2 / 3  
Feb 22, 2013   #4
it's a rewriting, i don't know that has improvement or not...

Nowadays, many people like to raise many kind of pets, one of common example are a dogs or cats. Raising pets require more time, love, and money to care them and build relationship. Therefore, I believe that pets should be treated family members, there are three reasons to explain my opinion.

First of all, people raise pets because of interesting and relaxation, and pets offer lots of benefit to people, such as experience of raising, communicating with other animals. When people were playing with their pets always feel happy. Therefore, if people decide to raise pets, they should take care their pets very carefully and friendly, and have responsibility to take care their pets, keeping their pets safe as much as they can, just like their children.

Second, we can't forget the true, pets are same to human, and they are life. Although pet's communication ways are different from human, they still have their languages and behaviors, and people still can understand their feeling or behaviors by other ways. For example, dogs are very common which be raised. Although they can't speak any human language, people still can base on their body language to understand how they feel. That means people should treat their pets as a family member.

Third, pets should be treated family member, because people are pets everything. Pets are different from people, they can't like people to go outside activity or meet other friends by themselves. For example, dogs can't go to park to walk or buy some foods to eat by themselves, they do everything that need people help them. That means if pets without people's care, they can't live in human's community for long time.

In conclusion, even though pets are very different from human, they still are life. At the same time, when people raise their pets, pets also bring happiness and good experience to us, so i believe that we should treat them as family members and take care their life.
android21 10 / 56 20  
Feb 22, 2013   #5
Great job! There were a few errors, but overall the argument was clear and concise...Keep up the good work!!!!


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