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The idea of home-schooling and at-home teaching

TANJIN 7 / 6  
Oct 25, 2016   #1
Home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in the modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Use your own knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

In the past, home schooling was quite a remarkable idea and it seemed like the most natural way of teaching, but in present times it has come under scrutiny. It is agreed that Home schooling is unacceptable in the modern age. By analyzing both the incapability of parents to teach contemporary education to their child as well as no scientific approach using in learning process at home.

Every parent may not capable of teaching his or her child at home . Even those mums and dads succeeded at school ,could forget materials with the passage of time. For example, it is commonly understood that non professional teachers have break of study and practice. Unfortunately they may not enough good at all subjects than before to teach novice. Thus this makes it clear why home schooling cannot be supported in 21st century .

At home Parents, mentors and others ; moreover, probably use own method in teaching apprentices . Such method may not match with any scientific method that is highly required for job market or running businesses where child have to perform ultimately in future .For example, adolescence need modern approaches to be taught effectively. This effectiveness cannot be provided with offspring at own places. That is why the experience of professional teachers are demanded in today's world .

In summary, parents' hindrance to their children's learning process and non effective method operate to retard a student ability to learn new information .Thus it is clear why the idea of having home schooling cannot be supported. It is very detrimental for student's future who will lead our world in new and prosperous direction.

amrillahmk 29 / 47 6  
Oct 26, 2016   #2
education to their childchildren as well as

Every parent may not be capable of teaching his or her childit is okay to say their instead of her or his at home

... dads succeeded at school ,Theycould forget ...

have break of study and practice . take a break from study and practice

Unfortunately they may not enough goodmay not BE good enough, remember that the word good is an adjective at all subjects

probably use theirown method in teaching apprentices

where child have has to perform ...

Hi hope it helps to improve your academic writing. it seems you have problem with subject+verb agreement as wel as have problem whether or not the word is verb or adj. goodluck for your next writing
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Oct 26, 2016   #3

In the past, home schooling ...

In my opinion, your have a clear position in your task response but your explanation need more strong reason why do you agree with home schooling is unacceptable. You should mention your reason and more specific explanation. Which is because a good overview will attract people/examiner to read anymore.

Every parent may not capable of ...

Your explanation in this paragraph is not strong to support your opinion. I think it needs more explanation why moms and dads forget materials. Also, you must specify certain materials that they forget. In addition, your example not reflects and support your main idea. So, I hope you pay attention more and more for that, because it will reduce your coherence cohesion.

At home Parents,mentors and others ; moreover, probably use ...

In would argue that you give addition idea in this paragraph. As you mention before in your task response, you said that parents are not capable to teach in scientific method, but in this paragraph you mention mentor and others. So, it reduces your coherence and cohesion more and more. Please pay attention for this.

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