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IELTS2: Idea that students should be allowed to study with people who have the same capacity as them


yuanyuanyuan04 1 / -  
Dec 27, 2021   #1

different academic abilities and selection of students



SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SCHOOLS SHOULD SELECT STUDENTS ACCORDING TO THEIR ACADEMIC ABILITIES, WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER TO HAVE STUDENTS WITH DIFFERENT ABILITIES STUDYING TOGETHER. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND STATE YOUR OWN OPINION

In this day and age, the number of students who have great academic performance despite their age is rising at an unprecedented rate. While some people advocate the idea that students should be allowed to study with people who have the same capacity as them, others agree that a class should have students with different academic abilities. The following essay with discuss both views and raise the author's voice

On the one hand, arranging classes with students who share equal potential can bring about an array of benefits. One of the pros is that it will be extremely time-saving for prestigious students who want to go the extra mile in both their study as well as their future careers. It can be illustrated by the fact that in spite of learning something that they already understand with ordinary students, they can nurture their raw talent by studying with a specific pedagogy with people who are on the same level as them. Therefore, they can achieve a myriad of successes in their study from a very young age and can contribute greatly to society

On the other hand, there are also some merits to be gained when having students with a wide range of academic levels in the same class. First and foremost, gifted students can support their counterparts with lower study levels by instructing or providing knowledge since they might find it hard to comprehend some kind of lecture. Thereby, not only low-educated students can understand the lesson properly but also smart ones can revise it by reteaching it to others. Furthermore, if well-educated students are permitted to take high-level classes, they might graduate and find a job sooner than their friends, which may be really stressful for them when it comes to communicating with co-workers, mainly due to the lack of essential social skills and age barriers

In conclusion, while I agree that studying with same-level students can save time and make students gain a lot of achievements when they are still young, I also subscribe to the notion that combining students with various academic abilities also have many advantages.
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Dec 27, 2021   #2
In this day and age, the number of students ... an unprecedented rate

You are expected to restate the original discussion topic without adding any misleading statements or personal opinions that could alter the content presentation. This sentence is a personal opinion statement that is unsupported by the original topic indicators. Therefore, the paragraph will receive a percentage of point deductions for prompt topic alterations. This means the essay will start its base scoring considerations from a failing score aspect.

The following essay ... the author's voice

Another task percentage deduction since the author does not provide a clear personal opinion where required as indicated by the task accuracy requirements. The lack of the author's opinion, which represents a personal thesis statement was required in this paragraph presentation.

The first paragraph of the essay does not meet IELTS accuracy requirements and will not recieve a passing score. The rest of the essay also lacks discussion clarity. The public opinion is not represented accurately, making the reasoning paragraphs seem to come from a personal opinion standpoint.

The summary conclusion will also receive a failing mark because, rather than providing a discussion recap, the writer has chosen to discuss his opinion in this section. The lack of a proper concluding statement paragraph shows an incompletely developed essay and will result in an overall failing score.

In reference to the closing format, simply saying "In conclusion", but not actually providing the conclusion in the required format indicates the lack of a conclusion. It is not in the correct and expected format and therefore, cannot be scored based on a passing basis.


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