Thank you so much. I really appreciate your help.
but would mind explaining why did you cross out some words and sentences especially in the first and second reply?
Oh sorry! The reason I crossed out some words and sentences is because it's not needed. Make the sentence short, but concise.
I do agree with Pakias that you need to use a more advance vocabulary, depending on what grade you are in. Also, make sure you understand the words you're putting in your sentence, such as, "that enable the sun to
," (before I crossed that sentence out and correct it); enable may sound like it fits in along with the sentence but it doesn't. Enable cannot be used because it means authorize, to make possible
; you can't make the sun light up the room, it just does on its own. I hope you understand :)