Thank you so much. I really appreciate your help.
but would mind explaining why did you cross out some words and sentences especially in the first and second reply?
Oh sorry! The reason I crossed out some words and sentences is because it's not needed.
Make the sentence short, but concise.I do agree with Pakias that you need to use a more advance vocabulary, depending on what grade you are in. Also, make sure you understand the words you're putting in your sentence, such as, "
that enable the sun to," (before I crossed that sentence out and correct it); enable may sound like it fits in along with the sentence but it doesn't. Enable cannot be used because it means
authorize, to make possible; you can't make the sun light up the room, it just does on its own. I hope you understand :)