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IDEAS WORTH DATING, ideas which will be matched with character,


rosadesiana 38 / 40 2  
Oct 10, 2016   #1
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A 45-year-old white man was trying to uncover a number of ideas which will be match with his character, he would like to create a connection with the human being out of his comfort zone, home. He then searched them in ted sites and happily found some people who he thought will have appropriate visions with him. Firstly, he met a gardener, Ron Finley who believes that people should farm their own foods to get a healthy food, because food is the problem but food is also the solution. Then he moved to meet Eric McKean - a dictionary editor- who has a responsibility to put as much words into the dictionary. Next, he arranged a schedule to meet Beau lotto, who shared his views about the reality, in his opinion, human has no an access to discover the reality, even human has a perfect sensory information such as eyes and ears. He also spent time with a primatologist who said that Bonobos is a frequent imaging conflict and social issues. Then Jane McGonigal thinks that we have to show an epic mimic on our faces, which will show a positive energy, because you never know the upsides of your self until you did it. After that he met a mathemagician who told that math is not only a case of finding what is an X, but also to figure the reason. Lastly, he came to a vocalist and comedian place named Reggi, he explained that we have to make a decision to choose and continue our lives, because without decision we have no power, powerless means no change we will have.

PHA2016 39 / 62 4  
Oct 10, 2016   #2
Hello Rosa,

Then, he searched them (...) people who he thought will have ...

... food is the problem but food it is also the solution.

Then Jane McGonigal thinksthough that we have to ...

After that he met a mathemagician who ...

hope these help,
fauziyahtami 22 / 38 6  
Oct 10, 2016   #3
Helo rosa,
hope you doing well
well, you've done graet (great), yet lemme give you some suggestion

==> A 45-year-old white man was trying(tried) to uncover (...) which will be match(ed) with his character, (...) out of his comfort zone (as) home.

... people who he thought will have appropriate (his) visions with him .
==> .., Ron Finley (the one ) who believes that (...), because (since) (the) food is(gives)the(any) problem but food is also the solution, (Even though foods give some trouble but foods also be a solution) .

==> Then he moved(came) to meet Eric McKean - a dictionary editor- who (...) to put as much (many) words into the dictionary.
==> .., in his opinion, (a) human has
===> ... decision we have no power(which means)powerless means no change we will have (we cannot (change anything) .

Good luck and keep writing :)


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