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My idol - a man born without arms or legs


thanhgiang 1 / -  
Jun 11, 2015   #1
Most everyone has an idol who inspires us in our life. For me, Nick Vujicic is the one who I particularly admire.Born without arms or legs, he had a lot of difficulties in his life. For him, the daily activities which is simple for the ordinary people couldn't. Despite that, he got over his disability to be lived like other ordinary people. he was able to swim, play sports and so on.he but has deep knowledge about life as well. Therefore, he is now well-known as an internationally motivational speaker. he inspires millions of people from the disabled to the ordinary people so that they can overcome difficulties and be accessible to life easier. His extraordinary fortitude promotes me a lots in my life so he is always my idol in my mind.

chuoi9 3 / 8 3  
Jun 12, 2015   #2
Hi @thanhgiang, I am a beginner. And below are my recommendations.

Most everyone has an idol who inspires usthem in their lives .
For him, the daily activities which is simple for the ordinary people couldn't --> He can not do daily activities which are simple for ordinary people

he got over his disability to be lived like other ordinary people --> he learnt to cope with his disability and live like an able-bodied person.

he has deep knowledge aboutof life as well
he inspires millions of people from the disabled to the ordinary people so that they canto overcome difficulties

I hope that my recommendations will be useful for you.
justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Jun 12, 2015   #3
- Most Everyone has an idol who inspires us in our life.

- For him, The daily activities which is simple for the ordinary people,for him is difficult and it seems that he couldn't do it .

- Despite that, he got over his disability to be livedlive like other ordinary people.

- He but has deep knowledge about life as well.

- Therefore He is now well-known as an internationallyinternational motivational speaker.

- He inspires millions of people from the disabled to the ordinary people , so that they canto help them overcome difficulties and be accessibleto liveto life easier.

- His extraordinary fortitude promotes me a lots of aspirations in my life so he is always my idol in my mind .

Than, as you can see above I made a few grammar corrections.
You also have to practice on your sentence construction.

Keep writing

Cheers!!!


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