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IELTS_ Why little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out?


Ibrahim_Xian 6 / 9 6  
Aug 8, 2013   #1
Topic: Little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. why have people done so little about it? how can we solve this peoblem.

There is a widely held perception in many parts of the world today that biological diversity is in decline. Oddly, though, very few actions have been taken by people to stem this tide. In this essay, I intend to explore the sources of this vicious circle along with some viable solutions to it.

Clearly, the most serious problem problems of endangered species extinction are often felt in rural areas. As a result of over cultivation & deforestation, natural habitats for plants and animals are increasingly axed. Little wonder, they become dying out. Moreover, some famer still hunt endangered animals for money (e.g. selling their fur, organs, bones etc.). Ironically, on one hand, people criticize poor farmers' illicit behaviors. On the other hand, they aspire things like shark fins, ivories. In addition, many endangered species seriously serve no useful purpose to human beings, thus some people simply do not believe we need to protect them.

In order to save endangered species from extinction, I believe we must first address its root causes. Perhaps the most effective method of doing this would be for government to provide financial incentives to rural dwellers, who willingly sacrifice certain farmlands and converting them to suitable habitats for plants and animals. Admittedly, such incentives would probably not fully compensate farmers for the lose income. However, this would at least soften the hardship of living in a shrunken land resources. One further measure would to promote educational campaigns warning people about the seriousness of the reducing biological diversity.

In reality, of course, the challenges that presented in saving endangered species are numerous and complex. Although they are by no means insurmountable, it is highly unlikely that they will be reserved in the foreseeable future.

alice0209 12 / 18 12  
Aug 10, 2013   #2
Oddly, though, very few actions have been taken by people to stem this tide.

Clearly, the most serious problem problems of endangered species extinction are often feltoften happened in rural areas.

On the other hand, they aspire to things like shark fins, ivories.

In addition, many endangered species seriously serve no useful purpose to human beings, thus some people simply do not believe we need to protect them.

In fact, many endangered species serve no practical purpose to human beings, thus we simply don't feel the need to protect them.

Perhaps the most effective method of doing this would be for the government to provide financial incentives to rural dwellers, who willingly sacrifice certain farmlands and converting them to suitable habitats for plants and animals.

Perhaps the most effective way would be for the government to provide incentives for the hunters and farmers, encouraging them to stop damaging the environment and turn back the habitats to those animals and plants.

Admittedly, such incentives would probably not fullyfail to compensate farmers for the lose income. However, this would at least soften the hardship of living in a shrunken land resources. One further measure would be to promote educational campaigns warning people about the seriousness of the reducing biological diversity.

I think that the word"campaign" is used in political context.
You could say: One further measure would be to educate people about the seriousness of the reducing biological diversity.

In reality, of course, the challenges that presented in saving endangered species are numerous and complex. Although they are by no means insurmountable, it is highly unlikely that they will be reserved in the foreseeable future.

This paragraph is little confusing. I thought that "they" means "challenges", so you are saying that those challenges will unlikely be reserved?? Or you want to say that the species will be reserved?

Overall, I feel that you didn't mention that why have people done so little about protecting endangered species as requested in the topic. Also, your point about extinction is limited in "land problems"(like deforestation). But about extinction, I'm sure that there are another aspects. Maybe you could say more about that.

Hope this help:)
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Aug 10, 2013   #3
Clearly, the most serious problem problems of endangered species extinction are often felt in rural areas.

... I'm going to change the order a bit;
The most serious issues that cause the extinction of endangered species often do happen in rural areas.

. Little wonder, they become dying out. Moreover, some famer still hunt endangered animals for money

.... how about killing animals for fun? fishing and hunting? In simple terms, people destroy nature and others lives just entertain themselves.


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