most of the countries facing is
most countries
are facing
Resulting, the growth in the people who abandoning their motherland in order to save their lives and their loved ones
As a results, there is a significant growth in the amount of people who abandon their motherland in order to save their lives as well as those of their loves ones.
which I believe we have to understand being humans.
I don't quite understand this part.
There are A LOT of grammatical errors... the words are all jumbled up. I don't know where to start anymore Also, if the question was about whether the government should allow to accept asylum seekers or not, I feel like you're not directly answering the question. You talked about their traumas, tax payers not liking them but you didn't really say why the government should accept them or not. You have to give reasons that impacts the government to make the decision. Remember, you have to take a stand and give reasons supporting that stand. But if the topic was about whether people should seek shelter in another land or not, you have some good points. You should make your answers more clear.
Don't be disheartened. You can try again! I hope I helped. Good luck!