hello, your essay looks short. it should contain 250 words at minimum. Well here are some suggestions.
1. you do not explain whether you agree or disagree with the statement. After doing that you support your opinion with examples, and also your examples are not much supportive.
2.your sentence structure is faulty, for example,
It is agreed that spending more money on education is beneficial for people more than the sport.
try this:
spending money on education is more beneficial than spending on sports
For example, when I was at college I have learned a lot of things about learning English.
I learned English in my collage that helps me a lot to increase my skills in acquiring knowledge.
3.
some of the Indian people who have finished their education are working now in different places all around the world. For this reason, the number of poverty will went down later.
HOW??? it is not reducing poverty in India if they are working in different places all around the world.
4.
As this example shows, education has a positive effect on reducing poverty.
no need for this sentence.
5.
discovering the world widely
widely is either unnecessary or inappropriate here.
6. try to compare education and sports to prove your point.
7. grammar should be reviewed because your grammatical skills are judged in IELTS.