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Essay for IETLS: Natural Talents and Trained Talents. Dicuss.


Lynn Truong 3 / 4  
Jul 9, 2010   #1
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Question:
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


My answer:
Talents are those who attain a certain exceptional skill that others cannot be compared to. What attributes to become talents has been discussed by many people. It is believed by some that several people are naturally born a talent of music or sport. Some other, on the other hand, claim that any child can be trained to be the talented sports person or musician.

Traditionally, many educational institutes have been established by basing on the needs of society and of parents, and on what children are expected to become in the future. For example, sports school is to train the future excellent sports persons; art schools are for movie stars, singers and musicians or artist of the years ahead. It is subsequently understandable for some who believe that talents can be trained to be. In reality, there are many good examples of people from zero, but through the sustainable training process, to become the success story in sport or artist history.

People who were born talented probably inherit from parents' or ancestor's prominent genes. This special natural skill is unique, and it is hardly found in someone who is by training process to get talented. It can be understood that when a child of a well-known musician were born, he would possibly possess the innate ability for improvisation. Mozart, music composer of every time, was a very good example for this extraordinary.

I believe that talents can be taught. It is because with continuing training, efforts in conjunction with desires for a certain skill, either on sport or art, any one of us certainly will be excel in this area. Conversely, a person with "God bless" ability which is not under an appropriate training process could not go any further mile. However, it would make perfect and phenomenal if persons with special talent are well trained.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Jul 11, 2010   #2
Talented people are those who attain a certain exceptional skill that others' skill cannot be compared to.

What talents should be attributed to has been discussed by many people.

Some others , on the other hand, claim that any child can be trained to be the talented sports person or musician.

In reality, there are many good examples of people who seem to have been talented from the time of their birth, but through the ...

Conversely, a person with "God bless" innate ability which is not under an appropriate training process could not go any further mile. --- I don't really understand this sentence! Please revise it somehow. Google the word innate. It is a useful word for this essay.

Hey, I am glad you are participating here! :-)


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