This version is most certainly much improved over the first one. It now reflects all sides of the argument and carries logical reasoning in every paragraph. Due to the word limit, I know that you cannot expand the discussion further so please allow me to correct some grammar points for you just to polish the paper :-). Here is what I found:
While the other party are concerned about the fate of the current local shops located
in the region. I believe that the new supermarket will bring up positive results economically and socially.
- the other
parties ...
By means of an International store, this resorts that more than one brand for a single products are being introduced to the
customer, therefore , the prices will be competitive
- As an international store, the big supermarket will bring more product brands to the shelves for introduction to the consumers. This will result in competitive prices.
This will make the community to feel more satisfied when shopping for
their needs in one place rather than roaming all the distant local stores
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The local community will feel more satisfied when shopping for their needs because they no longer have to go to different stores for different productsHowever, the second party suggests to stick to the
local shops. They claim that building a big store will bring more traffic congestion and will lead noise in the area.
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there are claims that the ease of shopping will also result in more traffic congestion and noise pollution in the area.As a result, this will raise the
capital asset .
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income of the state through taxes .
At last, being a supporter of the first party, I expect that by the coming years our
neighborhood will guarantee a good rank in case of economical stability .
- Being a strong supporter of the supermarket chain opening, I am of the opinion that our community stands to greatly benefit from the existence of the supermarket over the coming years and it will bring economic stability to our little town as well.
Piece the essay together with my corrections I believe you will like the new flow of thought that was created in support of your argument.