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ILETS essay. Becoming difficult to escape from media.


Alisha123 9 / 18  
Jul 10, 2011   #1
It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Advantages and disadvantages of living in media rich society.

In today's world, media is considered to be one of the vital forms of communication. We are so much surrounded my media that we get easily influenced by it. Old Media like televison, Radio and newspaper are the most common way of media communication. However, with the recent advent of computers and mobile phones, there is bombartment of information in our minds. Considering this fact, the pros and cons of Media rich society are analyzed before the conclusion is drawn.

Firstly, the advent of technology has eased the commnication through media around the world. By browsing on compter for just an hour, hundreds of advertisments can be seen. With a just one click of mouse, you tend to aware about loads of information happending around the globe. Recent media has flourished the new ways of communication and people get the exact information even is thousands miles away. Not only that, rapid spread of media has helped countries to strengthen their economies by runnung numnerous businesses within their own country. For example, China is considered to be the largest exporter around the world. China through media has analyzed the potential market of consumers by watching the needs of consumers displayed in televisions and advertisments ran ny respective countries. It can be clearly seen that media plays a dominant role in boosting business development which leads to economic growth.

In contrast, there are certain downsides of being constrained too much around media world. Nowadays, electronic media overemphasize more on positive aspects and hindering the negative side. Likewise, many media channels have been opened up and has created the ambiquity among human minds. For exmaple, Many companies promote their brands by communicating through billboards, most of the brands display the positive aspects to attract the many consumers however the side effects of using the product are communicated to massess. So, media can also create negative impact in ones mind which on the whole is harmful to society.

In summary, by evaluating the positive as well as negative sides of media society. I believe, media has a powerful impact on lives. No doubt, by having media world has become a global village. But we have to be very sensible and responsible in dealing with media.

raxymoo 1 / 2  
Jul 10, 2011   #2
your essay is great I w=really enjoyed it, but check out the some spellings. For example, China is considered to be the largest exporter around the world. China through media has analyzed the potential market of consumers by watching the needs of consumers displayed in televisions and advertisments ran ny respective countries.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,334 129  
Jul 20, 2011   #3
Sorry Alisha, I just don't know. I don't know their grading criteria. Some people have told me about it, but I still don't know how to interpret it in the same way as the actual graders.

Please just type the essay 5 more times, and use the corrections people gave you. Practice the correct way, and you will reprogram yourself in the correct way.

:-)
ajit88rai 22 / 188 3  
Jul 20, 2011   #4
Can anyone evaluate and rate my essay as per required in ILETS EXAM..

Alisha, no one else other than a professional IELTS examiner would be able to exactly grade your essay because their criteria is based as:
4-POINT CRITIQUE
--->TASK ACHIEVEMENT
--->LEXICAL RESOURCE
--->COHERENCE AND COHESION
--->GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY

I will give you a name of a guy who will professional rate your essay...however he rates only one essay for free and the rest you will have to pay for... I had sent him my final essay which I wrote in the IELTS exam and he rated it accurately...so maybe you can try him.

His name is Miracel.

hope it will help you...

good luck and cheers


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