Numerous people consider that childhood years are crucial.Yet,the rest think opposite due to the fact that it is realy depend upon the person and circumstances.However I strongly believe that childhood years are important because it is the first stage- Why do some people think that childhood is a crucial state? Childhood is the first stage of what? As an introduction this is very weak and confusing. It has hanging sentences and does not really convey a complete thought nor your opinion on the topic. I suggest that you revise your introduction in order to clean it up. Restate the prompt, create a thesis statement and then give your opinion. That way the reader will have an idea of the flow of discussion that will take place in the essay.
First things first,imitation.At this stage a child usually tries to imitate actions from their parents.Even though strangers or friends can also make a huge impact on child's personalities.Despite this possibility majority of kids are always stick to parents because most of their time are with their parents especially in young age. Therefore it is my first reason.- When considered as supporting facts for your stand on the issue, it seems that you wish to concentrate on the learning experience that a child experiences in child hood. You need to dig deeper and give examples of the learning that takes place during this time. Don't forget to mention at what age learning begins for a child in order to create a solid foundation for your supporting statements.
Secondly but nonetheless is knowledge.At this period a child has tremendous questions to ask because they are not experienced yet and at this point the information that is going to comprehend is essential.Some of the information might be useless for a certain period of time but I have a strong belief that knowledge is always usefull no matter what happens.Moreover those are some preliminary knowledge that decide whether kids are prepared for the next stage or not.Thus it is my second reason.
By way of a conclusion,based on the arguments explored above.I consider that childhood is a significant time in a peson's life .That is the period where your character is forming.And also the very first knowledge that you are about to possess without it you cannot go to the next level .So yes indeed I completely agree with the statement and consider childhood is a considerable time in a human's life.- This is a good conclusion. However, due to the shaky first and second paragraphs, the effect of your conclusion is lessened.
It is important that you revise your paper based upon my suggestions above. While this is an excellent effort, it is a long way from being coherent and grammatically correct. That is something that can only be corrected once you have created a solid foundation for your paper based upon the content. If I correct the grammatical errors now, it may not be of help to you because of the forthcoming revision.