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newworld 8 / 19  
Nov 28, 2007   #1
Hello Sarah,

I paste my partial first draft about immigration. It should be Argument/research paper. What do ypu think about it? The structure and the way of telling is ok or not? Feel free to express your thoughts. I am ready change it. Would u Please check the grammer mistakes? By the way I got the grade on my Narrative Essay. It is B+. It all goes to you. Thank you.

Paper due is on friday. Would you please send your opinion? I waiting for your reply. I am working on the remaining portion.

The United States is the Melting pot. America is composed of multicultural people .Of course the U.S citizenship test tells that there is no racial and ethnic requirements than the proficiency of English and U.S history. Immigrants assimilate well into American society also want to join the mainstream; they are not threatening the national culture. Historian Stephan thernstrom writes"Whatever their origins, they will have joined the American majority, which is determined not by bloodiness but by commitment to the principles for which this nation stands" (qtd. in Isbister 19).

Immigrants want to learn English. In the evidence of New York times, A frequent claim, for example, is that today's immigrants do not assimilate as readily as those in the past. But English-Language courses have long waiting lists (Lewis A29). Also immigrants learn English quickly. Older Immigrants learn English extremely difficult, but the second generation quickly realizes that English is essential and becomes fluent rapidly, however, The third and fourth generation's native language tends to be lost; they will have to study their native language in school to try to reconnect with their language (Chomsky 110).

Immigrants are not responsible for crime. The FBI report said," In 2000 no incidents of international terrorism happened inside the U.S, and eight incidents of domestic terrorism happened by U.S citizens belonging to animal rights group or environmental groups. In 2001 there were twelve incidents of domestic and one incident of international (September 11 attacks) terrorism happened. .... Those who were involved in the 9/11 attacks were not citizens however, all but four were legally in the country at the time of attacks.... . Does this mean we need to do better, different screening who want to enter into U.S? possibly."
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Nov 30, 2007   #2
Greetings!

You've written an informative essay. I think it would benefit from some careful proofreading, though. Here are some general tips for you:

U.S is the immigrant's nation that often called "melting pot". - Don't forget to put articles before nouns. It's "The U.S." and "the melting pot."

Also between 1901 and 1910 total American population increased by 1percent per year on the other hand legal Immigrants growthonly0.36percent.(Gale,82-84) also many immigrants go back. - Watch your spacing; the words run together in this sentence.

Do not capitalize "immigrants" unless it begins a sentence.

Proofread carefully to catch mistakes like "united sates"; it should always be "the United States" unless you abbreviate it as "the U.S." or "the U.S.A."

Leave a space before the parenthesis and do not place a comma before the page number in the parenthetical citation: say "electronics (Sutcliffe 93)" instead of "electronics(Sutcliffe,93)"

Several of your quotations appear to have mistakes in them; for example: " Some immigrants work in the informal economy don't have federal, state and social security taxes but they don't have access to any .... befits from the employee"(37). I suspect it should be "working" and "benefits" and "employer."

This section has several mistakes in it that I think proofreading would catch: Immigrants are not responsible for Crimean [did you mean crime?] the FBI report said, [end sentence with a period, not a comma] In 2000 no incidents of international terrsiom1 [1?] happened ,and [the space goes after the comma, not before] eight domestic ... In 2001 twelve domestic incidents and one international(september11attacks) . [watch spacing] Those who were involved in the9/11 [spacing] attacks were not citizens but they are all in the country at the time of attacks." Those crimes were on the crime of violence not the crime on the Immigrants", and the people who were on the visa had not violated because of their visas. - This last sentence does not really make sense.

I can't correct all of it for you, but go through it carefully and you will find more instances where I think my guidelines will help you.

Your citations are not consistent. If you are using MLA citation style, there are numerous sites online that tell you how to do it. Some of your citations appear to be missing information; for example: Chomsky, Aviva. They take our Jobs: and 20 other myths and Immigration. Boston: Massachusetts, 1992. Is this a book? If so, you need the publisher's name. If it's an article, you need the journal or magazine it came from. And is it really "myths and Immigration"? "on Immigration" would make more sense.

You have a lot of good information in your essay. I think you just need to smooth out the rough edges a little! :-)

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com
OP newworld 8 / 19  
Nov 30, 2007   #3
Hello srah,

Thank You for your feedback. I really appreciated.

Thanks again
OP newworld 8 / 19  
Dec 14, 2007   #4
Want some editing help immediately Please!

Hello,

My teacher graded my research paper and gave some feedback in clarity and grammer.
I corrected that. Would you please check that for me! The due is tomorrow Help me Please!

1. It has been said that immigrants population impact America. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration birthrate is decreasing; Immigrant doesn't added check this quote - grammar is incorrect to global population-he nearly moves from one spot on the planet to another" (Gale 84).

mine is
It has been said that immigrants population impact America. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration birthrate is decreasing; An Immigrant doesn't added to global population-he nearly moves from one spot on the planet to another"

2. Although, there are many other arguments against immigration, America should welcome Immigration also should indeed reduce restrictions. Rephrase for clarity.

mine is
Although, there are many other arguments against immigration,Immigrants are fortune of diversity; They are a positive influence on United States.So America should welcome Immigration and reduce restrictions on immigration

Please give me your suggestion.

Thanks
Newworld
OP newworld 8 / 19  
Dec 14, 2007   #5
Hello sarah,

Would you please check the grammer for my essay Please! I edited this paper after my teacher graded . Before to submit I want to get the feedback from you. Please help me. This is my last work.

Shanmugasundaram1
Restrictions on Immigration Are Not Necessary
Immigration: Immigration is a hotly debated topic in recent years, but a close look at the issue will show that immigrants contribute a lot to American society, bringing cultural diversity, a ready labor force, and many other benefits to the country. So United States Should allow legal Immigrants also should reduce the restrictions on immigration from all over the world . Immigration is a movement of people from one place to another. The U.S is the immigrant's nation that is often called "The melting pot".

It has been said that immigrants population impact America. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration birthrate is decreasing; An Immigrant doesn't added to global population-he nearly moves from one spot on the planet to another" (Gale 84). Another point is immigrants will not "swamp" America. In 1910, 15 percent of Americans were foreign born; In 1999 our foreign-born were about 10percent of our total. Also between 1901 and 1910 total American population increased by 1 percent per year on the other hand legal immigrants growth only 0.36 percent (Gale 82). Also many immigrants go back. To begin with, article in LA Times said, the US INS estimates that 300,000 people illegally cross the US-Mexican border each year. The common assumption is they all stay here. But in reality, more than nine out of 10 don't . They go back and forth between Mexico and the United States, says the INS (James D1).

Immigrants are hard working, innovative skilled workers. In New York Times, the historic American pattern of striving immigrants building the economy. " Here in San Jose, the big city of Silicon Valley, Vietnamese are about 10 percent of the population, Vietnamese are thriving, and many a high school valedictorian is of Vietnamese origin" (Anthony A29). Another example is, in U.S

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universities continuing the decline of enrollments in advanced engineering training among the native born, the proportion of the foreign born has grown rapidly. By 1987 over half of all assistant professors in the united sates were foreign born, and it is estimated that by 1992 over 75 percent of all engineering professors in the U.S will be foreign-born. Already one out of three engineers with a doctorate working in U.S industry today is an immigrant (Ruben 235).

Certainly Immigrants helps to alleviate labor shortages. There is no question, American economy is dynamic, growing and changing. As it changes, some sectors gain and others lose, the demands that employers have for labor are not matched. Immigration helps solve this problem. Immigrant workers furnish the labor force in three areas of the economy. First they fill various professional post such as doctors. Second they occupy low paid service jobs. Third they go with low paid manufacturing jobs such as clothing and electronics (Bob 93).

Immigrants create long term befits to US economy. According to News Week report Michael, formerly chief economist to George Bush ," The short-term costs of immigration today are much higher but in the long run, immigrants are still great news for our economy" (qtd. in Rich, Andrew 18).

Immigrants pay more taxes than natives. One myth about immigrants is that, they are not paying taxes. Absolutely this is not a fact; Aviva Chomsky said " Immigrants no matter what their status, pay the same taxes that citizens do-sales taxes, real estate taxes, gasoline taxes". Also said, " Some immigrants work in the informal economy don't have federal, state and social security taxes but they don't have access to any .... benefits from the employer"(37).

Immigrants take Americans jobs. But natives are wrong; the fear is largely unfounded. Of the 500 occupation categories studied in its computer analysis, U.S news documented only 6 percent in which new immigrants held 10 percent or more of the jobs (52). Also they are not cause for unemployment. The worst unemployment was happened in 1930 when immigration almost ends

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(Isbister 14).
SEE ABOVE

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(Chomsky 180-182). "Communications must be improved between law enforcement, intelligence agencies and border patrol personnel. Computer system must be upgraded....borders in the U.S" (Gale 172).

Immigrants do not abuse welfare and social service system. Actually immigrants are less dependent than natives. According to Washington Post evidence, The U.S department of labor survey indicates that immigrants families are less dependent on welfare and receive lower level on welfare payment than natives families. A July 1992 business week article shows that immigrants earns $240 th billion per year, pay $90 billion per year in taxes and receive only $5 billion in welfare (Letter A26). Also they don't abuse health care services. Torres-Gil, the author of California-Mexican connection said, the health of Latino children prevalence of chronic illness conditions, and birth weight patterns is also good compared to non-Latinos , despite with higher poverty rates they rely on emergency and pregnancy related issues but not overuse the public health care system (171).

Another debate is that immigrants harm the environment. It is so absurd. Advocates argued that , "Immigrants maintain the science the technology already have begun to decrease the danger of pollution and to increase farm and industrial productivity" also said "they are all asset not a danger to America future" ( Bischoff 102-103). In American Demographic magazine Francese, president and proponent of open immigrant, said, "By continuing to restrict immigration tightly we shoot ourselves in both feet....the United States need to admit more immigrants now" (qtd. in Bischoff 103).

Although, there are many other arguments against immigration,Immigrants are fortune of diversity; They are a positive influence on United States. So America should welcome Immigration and reduce restrictions on immigration. Wattenberg, Senior fellow at the American Enterprise Institute, said "Immigration [can help] us become a stronger nation[...] in the global competition of civilization" (Gale 80). Being an immigrant I also agree with him. Because they are highly beneficial to this county in various ways. Regardless of benefit, they are harmless and want to be part of America.

Shanmugasundaram5 Works Cited
Kirchoff, Henry. Immigration Issues. Ed. Randall M. Miller. Connecticut: Greenwood press, 2002.
Chomsky, Aviva. They take our Jobs and 20 other myths and Immigration. Boston: Beacon Press, 1992.
Flanigan, James. "Blaming Immigrants won't solve Economic Woes". Los Angles Times15 August. 1993: D1.
Gale, Thomson. Immigration: Opposing View Points Series. Ed. Mary. E. Williams. Minnesota: Greeenhaven Press, 2004.
Isbister, John. Immigration Debate: Remaking America. Connecticut: Kumarian Press, 1996.
Letter, Frank Sharry. Washington Post 27January. 1994: A26.
Lews, Anthony. "The Politics of Nativisim" New York Times 14January. 1994: A9.
Mur, Andrew, and Thomas, Rich. "Economic cost of Immigration" News Week 9August.1993: 18.
Rumbaut, Ruben G."Passages to America". America at Century's End 1991: 235.
Sutcliff, Bob. "Immigration and the World Economy" Creating a New World Economy 1993: 93.
Torres-Gill, Fernando. "Separating Myth From Reality". California-Mexico Connection 1993: 171.
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Dec 17, 2007   #6
Greetings!

I think your essay turned out very well! Sorry I could not get back to you sooner, but we have been dealing with some major ice storm damage in my area. Here are just a couple more suggestions, in case you still have time to make changes:

Also between 1901 and 1910 total American population increased by 1 percent per year; on the other hand legal immigration grew only 0.36 percent

Being an immigrant I also agree with him, because they are highly beneficial to this county in various ways.

Best of luck in your studies!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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