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IELTS Essay: Impact of computer usage on children.


shaddy 17 / 47 7  
Apr 17, 2013   #1
Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Computer has become a part of almost everyone's life. It has been in discussion for a long time that whether it is good or bad for children. I believe that its virtues are far more than its vices. In the following paragraphs I will provide some reasons to support my statement.

The principal reason for considering computers for children in their everyday life is its usefulness in learning new things. There are many software that make difficult concepts of hard and dry subjects easy to absorb. For example, Algebra and Geometry are the two important and toughest concepts of mathematics but the intuitive nature of some good software makes it easy to learn for children. Moreover, the learning is very fast with computers and a child's mind adopts it quickly. To learn new things computers can help a child in various ways.

Another reason for promoting computer usage in children is that they do not feel any need to remain out of their homes for playing. For the countries where there are proper places for children games may this reason not be very effective but for others like Bangladesh, Pakistan and India etc. the computer games are really helpful. These games keep the children at home and a child remains safe from the vulnerabilities such as drugs, crimes and bad company. Undoubtedly, computers are a blessing for such an environment.

In conclusion, after analysing computer's usefulness in learning and giving an healthy environment I disagree that computers have more bad effects on children than that of good effects.

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Hi,

Kindly review my essay and please suggest me any important advice you consider for my writing. I've my exam in a couple of weeks and I am targeting band 8.

Regards
S

rko029 4 / 9  
Apr 17, 2013   #2
Hi Shady, The essay is good...
father or mother should balance their children spare time with different activities, such as sports,reading,computer,sittings along his family,
the parents should weight each of the above among the day with different weights and priorities,
e.g.we can't keep the kid spare time playing games for 6 hrs,that will afftect the rest of other activities such as sports or sitting along with other family members (older brother,sister,father,mother), we can't depends for example on computer games in playing soccer without real practice in sporting club,

if we manage our kid day for the above activities,his personality will be stable.
Note: Father and Mother play a good role for staying aside with their kids in order to approach them with stories or advices or sharing some of the household task,that

build the child personality in effective way.

Hope i meet your expectations,
R.KO
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 17, 2013   #3
Another reason for promoting computer usage in children is that they do not feel any need to remain out of their homes for playing.

... This needs some improvement in presentation;
Another reason as to why it is good for children to use computers is that children would tend to spend more time at home rather than playing outdoors. ... However, I don't think this is a positive in terms of healthy growth of children. In my view, children need to socialize and interact with other people in order to learn many important social skills. Those are very important for them to be successful and happy in their adult life.

This is a good essay except for the reason in your second body para. Excellent essay structure :)
eileenalien 8 / 20 4  
Apr 17, 2013   #4
There are many software that make difficult

softwares
i think ur essay is good. Well-organised. However i think the reasons supporting your statement is not that strong.
And there are lots of people think drawbacks of computers outweigh the benefits when it comes to children's education. Maybe it is better to mention a few disadvantages of computers.
OP shaddy 17 / 47 7  
Apr 17, 2013   #5
This is a good essay except for the reason in your second body para. Excellent essay structure

Thanks alot dumi.

Does it matter in IELTS exam how strong one's arguments\reasons are, as mentioned by eileenalien?

Thanks again for reading and commenting on it.
OP shaddy 17 / 47 7  
Apr 18, 2013   #6
Hope i meet your expectations,
R.KO

Thanks buddy ! Cheers
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 18, 2013   #7
Does it matter in IELTS exam how strong one's arguments\reasons are, as mentioned by eileenalien?

Well.... IELTS is an exam that tests your English proficiency so in that respect, your arguments have somewhat less importance. However, this is an essay task and if you come up with strong arguments then they would help you impress the examiner. It would work in your favor for sure because your marks depend on the mood of the examiner. So, it's your job to impress him :D

You have very good writing skills and no doubt about that. You follow a good essay structure. But, I think you should take what eileenalien said a bit more seriously as it would certainly help you to get the maximum benefit with your writing talents :)
OP shaddy 17 / 47 7  
Apr 18, 2013   #8
You have very good writing skills and no doubt about that. You follow a good essay structure. But, I think you should take what eileenalien said a bit more seriously as it would certainly help you to get the maximum benefit with your writing talents :)

Great and thanks again.

softwares
i think ur essay is good. Well-organised. However i think the reasons supporting your statement is not that strong.
And there are lots of people think drawbacks of computers outweigh the benefits when it comes to children's education. Maybe it is better to mention a few disadvantages of computers.

Thanks eileenalien, your suggestions are equally important to me.

Cheers!!


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