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The importance of balancing our income and expense. Money Management.


Killua 5 / 10 2  
Oct 10, 2016   #1
Could you help me with my essay?Thank you very much.
Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life.How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money?

Growing inflation rate,numerous bills,all of these show the increasing importance of balancing our income and expense.Many people,however,find it difficult to develope the skills of how to control their own finance.This essay will discuss some approaches to learning the related knowledge.

One of the practical methods is to take some classes about economic and money management.Understanding taxation,purchasing thoughfully,choosing financial products,and so on,all of these need people to be familiar with some basic financial concepts.Therefore,resigning economic classes,which can help people to bulid a systematic frame of finance,is playing a critical role in learning money management.Meanwhile,for students,there are plenty of economic lectures in the colleges,universities;for those who take part-time or full-time job,there are also online platforms providing quality lectures from excellent universities and institutions.Coursera,for example,has some economic enducations organized by the University of Illinois,the Columbia University.

Another method is to query financial institutions.Financial institutions are profitable institutions,so not only do they like well investments,but they also own some professional employees.For instance,people can seek some specialist advice on how to set up a propriate spending and saving plan from them.Althogh some of them will make profit from persuading people to purchase some unnecessary and costly financial products.

Finally,there are also some specialists analyse money management and the economic in their columns on magazines or websites;podcasts like Money Planet can also bring people some useful information.Though people have to read and listen with basic economic knowledge and critical thinking.

In conclusion,there are numerous ways to learn the skill of managing money effectively,from which people can choose based on their preference.I think people can first go for the education and then use what they learn in practical world.
Ucha MSN 17 / 26 4  
Oct 10, 2016   #2
Many people,however,find it difficult to develope the skills ofDEVELOP THEIR SKILLS ON

how to control their own financeMANAGE THE FINANCIAL BELONGINGS .

This essay will discuss some approaches to learning the related knowledge.ABOUT SOME APPROACHES RELATED TO MAJOR LEARNING

... classes about economic and moneyBUSINESSmanagement.

Understanding ABOUT taxation, purchasing thoughfully, (...) with some basic financialECONOMIC concepts.
fauziyahtami 22 / 38 6  
Oct 10, 2016   #3
Hello,
Hope you enjoy your time
You have done great, yet lemme give you some suggestion

==> Growing inflation rate,numerous bills,............................ income (you can use influx or profit) and expense(expenditure/ outlay/ spending money) .
==> ...find it difficult to develope the skills of how to control (arrange, set, oversee) their own finance.
==> Understanding taxation,purchasing thoughfully
==> ...which can help people to bulid(build) a systematic frame of finance
==> ... of economic lectures in the colleges, (or) universities;for those who take (a) part-time or full-time job...
...has some economic en ducations organiz (s)ed by the University of Illinois...(your example is quite good, yet it will be more prettily if you complete with 5w1H --> help to increase your score)

==> Financial institutions are profitable institutions,so not only do they like(they not only like to do a)well(you can use good, instead) investments,but they ...

==> ... advice on how to set up a propriate (Appropriate or a proprietary?) spending and saving ...(try to extend your instance by using 5W1H)

==> Altho(u)gh some of them will make (the) profit from persuading people to ...
==> Though people have to read and listen with(to) basic economic knowledge ...
I think, (firstly) people can first go (can go after the education) for the education and then use what they learn in(the) practical world.

You did several typos, be careful when you were writing.
Good luck and keep writing :)
Asma Raj 6 / 10  
Oct 10, 2016   #4
Hello Killua,
I would like to give some corrections to your essay.

1. This sentence "Many people,however,find it difficult to ..." should be "Many people, however, find it difficult to developing the skills of how to control their own finance".

2. Please make sure about some spellings on your essay because this is crucially in having good essay, for example, thoughfully, enducations, and althogh. They should be thoughtfully, educations, and although.

3. This sentence "there are also some specialists ..." should be "there are also some specialists analyzing money management."

Keep writing Killua :)
Yonathan 46 / 65 5  
Oct 10, 2016   #5
Hi Killua
Let me give you some correction

... numerous bills, all of these showshowed the increasing importance ...
Many people,however , find it difficult to developedevelop the skills of how to ...
... for those who take (a) part-time or full-time job...
...has some economic enducationseducations organized organised by the University of Illinois,..
...so not only do they like wellgood investments, but they ...
AlthoghAlthough, some of them will make profit ...
... to read and listen withto basic economic knowledge ...

When you use punctuation marks like , or . you must give a space
Thank you


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