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The importance of communication skills in job relation


yika 6 / 12 1  
Dec 6, 2016   #1
The importance of communication skills in job relation is illustrated in the table in which from the survey conducted in 1997 and 2006. Overall, the kinds of skills which consist of external and internal communication which people who are asked in the survey tend to increase from 1997 to 2006.

Firstly, many features of external communication which is needed by someone in their jobs. The highest percentage in 1997 is dealing with people skill at 60 percent which it is mean that this is almost twice higher than the percentage of selling a product or service. In the eight years later, the percentage of external communication have the same trend from before and also the each example of skills tend to increase although the percentage of selling product or service decrease at 21 percent in 2006.

Secondly, the internal communication (within company) also have many kinds of examples and these types tend to increase by 1 until 9 percent from 1997 to 2006. The lowest percentage at 7 percent in making speeches or presentation, but the listening carefully to colleges has the highest percentage also notice in same factor in 1997 and it increase to 4 percent and 9 percent

nda18 46 / 81 9  
Dec 7, 2016   #2
Hi yika,

when i read your writing, i do not know what kind of writing it is, is it essay? or summary?
however, you bring the word 'table' that means that this is writing task 1 for IELTS.

> Firstly, please attach the image of the table, so we can check the information in your essay.
> Regardless YOUR GRAMMATICAL ERROR, i think your essay is not provide information well.it is because i cannot imagine the table just by reading your essay. you also not mention several information, but explain the increment, making the reader confused.

> it would be better if you arrange your information again.
> here are my suggestion for you

... who are asked in the survey tendTENDED to increase from 1997 to 2006....
...in 1997 isWAS dealing with...
...which it isWAS mean that this isWAS almost twice...
... communication haveHAD the same trend...
...of skills tendTENDED to increase...
...service decreaseDECREASED at 21...
...also haveHAD many kinds...
...types tendTENDED to increase...
...to colleges hasHAD ...

(always WATCH YOUR TENSES)

... of external communication which is needed by someone ...
( you do not have MAIN VERB here)

thank you, i hope it will help you
keep writing and break a leg
debby17 8 / 20 5  
Dec 12, 2016   #3
Hi Yika,

1. You should provide the picture of your essay, so we can check the information from the table.
2. The survey conducted in 1997 and 2006, you should use "past tense" to explain you opinion in the essay. I don't think you do this in your essay.

3. You have include 3 main parts of IELTS writing part 1 : introduction, overview and detail. But I can't elaborate more in this part because I can't imagine the table.

Thanks
Arlen 20 / 40 3  
Dec 13, 2016   #4
Hello,

1. ... 60 percent which it is mean(two verbs) that ..
2. types tend to increase by 1 untilto 9 percent from 1997 to 2006....
3. strongly to post the topic or reader are confused about the correction of your essay.

hope it helps!


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