IELTS: Importance of studying History in school.

To some people studying the past has little value. Do you think it is important to do so? What will be the effect if children are not taught history?

These days, History has declared an optional subject. People do not like to study it, and only few select it willingly. However, in my opinion, History is an important subject for children to study.

For example, studying the past requires interrogations and interpretations. Such as if history of Ireland is to study, it is necessary to know Gaelic, an ancient Irish language. Therefore, it increases other skills along with the knowledge. Likewise, History includes the conflicts among different races and religions in the past. So, after knowing about how these conflicts happened and then sorted, they can be avoided in present days.

Moreover, studying the past explains most of the situations happening these days. Such as conflicts between India and Pakistan are still not resolved since 1947. As a result, this affects the peace attempts in Asia because both are powerful Asian countries, and they always try to attack each other.

Therefore, if children do not like studying history, they will lack lots of knowledge and skills. History teaches them the facts of life along with ranges of skills, since History provides them with the ability to analyse and judge the affairs of the past on their own. In addition, they also learn to research the facts and material through planning and judgement. Moreover, History also triggers an interest to study other subjects because they develop various skills that can be applied in those subjects.

In conclusion, I must say History should be a compulsory subject for children so they will know better about the world they live in. And, various techniques should use to make it an interesting subject.

Nowadays


history (with small letter)


few people


These sentences are very vague.Firstly, you should write a topic sentence to present your main idea and after expand it with details, examples.


want to study


most studies are happening


these days or will happen in the close or far future
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put a comma after because


delete the comma


furthermore or additionally or finally


lose


where is the verb of this sentence?


analyze (verb)


your conclusion is very short

thanx Habib. I really appreciate ur time and effort. But there are few corrections.
Do not put comma after subordinating conjunction if it proceeds the second part of the sentence which it has converted into a dependent sentence. So, we wont put comma after 'because'.

Use comma after 'Therefore', if u want to emphasis on ' Therefore'. but yes u can avoid comma here.
I will try to correct other mistakes...thanx