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The importance of workers appearance in organisations


tiraatira11 21 / 9 2  
Mar 30, 2016   #1
Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Employees' appearance factor is the foremost point in other offices while large number of organisations think good standard of their workers as the ultimate thing. I strongly believe that both of these perspectives are essentials role which have to be combined for creating trust from their bidders.

Undoubtedly, it cannot be denied that the importance of good appearance is a valuable thing to receive faith from companies' customers because how their client trust their organisations if their employees look like drinkers. In credit card business, sales marketing dresses stylish and neat since they have to attract candidate client attention. Their appearance is their valuable asset as in reality people will judge someone who they have just met for the first time by their look. Also their style make applicant wanting to spend their time and listen on their explanation about their product.

However, looking good is not the only factor to persuade people to join as member. They also have to show their best outcome and force to establish faith of their customer for achieving their goal which is set by their office. They effort to study and improve much knowledge about their workplace since the candidate client will ask much information such as the company's background before give their trust and enroll as an applicant in their credit card company. So the marketing officers should have better work standard to complete their aims and receive trust from bidders.

To sum up, even though well-dress can make consumer paying attention to the workers, but I would suggest that both of work caliber and appearance should be applied and combined in companies to yield the most effective method which can gain faith from their applicants.
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Mar 30, 2016   #2
Hi Siti, good job on tackling this essay! A few suggestions however, please find my corrections below;

- Employees' - an apostrophe is not necessary
- think good standard - what do you mean by this?
- essentials role which have to be combined for
- in creating

- thingasset ( mind the words you input in your sentences )
- companies' - font#FF0000]an apostrophe is not necessary, though punctuation marks are essential to the completion of the word, you have to make sure that they are where they are suppose to be placed)

- theirare the clients going to - look like drinkersunprofessional .
- In the credit card business,
- the sales and marketing personnel dresses
- stylishly and neat
- sinceas they have

Siti, I made some corrections, I hope they're useful and please follow through with the suggested modification.
RAY93 35 / 186 136  
Mar 31, 2016   #3
Hi, tiraatira. here my comment. keep writing

Employees' appearance factor is the foremost point in other offices while large number of organisations think good standard of their workers as the ultimate thing.unclear sentence, did not obviously shown the contradict opinions

employees' appearance factor is the foremost point in certain offices while large number of organisations think to have a good working standard by their workers as the ultimate thing

I strongly believe that both of these perspectives are essentials roleissues

Undoubtedly, it cannot be denied that the importance of goodattractive appearance is a valuable thing to receive faith from companies' customers because how theirthe client could trust their organisations if their employees look like drinkers.

In credit card businessthe bank , sales marketing staffs dresses stylish and neat since they have to attract candidate client's attention.

Their appearance is their valuable asset as in reality people will judge someone who they have just met for the first time by their look.

Also their style make applicant wanting to spend their time and listen on their explanation about their product.

However, looking good is not the only factor to persuade people to join as A member. They also have to show their best outcome and force to establish THE faith of They effort --> this is noun not verb to study and improve

So the marketing officers should have better work standard to complete their aims and receive trust from bidders. --> compare to what?


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