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Most important benefits from a job: relax, and fulfilling - even if less money


undidiamaka 4 / 9  
Dec 5, 2012   #1
please can someone help me with this essay.

Is it more important to do work that one finds fulfilling or work that pay well? It is good to chose work that one finds fulfill than one that pay well, because when you're working where you relax, and fulfill even though they have to pay well. It is true that money is important in our living, but is not the reason why we will chose works that pay well, because money cannot buy happiness. When we enjoy our work we find happiness during the process of our work. The prospective of find fulfill work is very good for our living, and also gives us confidence in our life. Being happiness in the work is valuable that no money cannot provide. I believe that people work that well is always unhappy every time, because they don't have confidence in the life.

Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Dec 5, 2012   #2
I have some thoughts on this topic.

People may need to find work that pays a lot of money, because that money is needed to pay their expenses.

An enjoyable job may not pay enough to cover the bills, so that person may have no choice but to work a job that they don't like because it pays more.

A not fun or boring job that pays more would give the person peace of mind, knowing that they can pay their bills,and maybe have money for things that will make them happy- vacation, nice car, entertainment.

A fun job may pay less, but if it enough to live on, then the person will settle for being happy from their work, and if they don't make extra money, they can find inexpensive things like free entertainment, free activities, radio, tv, or time with family and friends.

I think this is personal preference. Some people do not mind making less money, because they feel happier that way. Some that make lots of money can find happiness by using money to buy nice things and fun entertainment.
OP undidiamaka 4 / 9  
Dec 5, 2012   #3
Thanks for your perspective respond!!
amandaco 5 / 11  
Dec 5, 2012   #4
one finds fulfill than one that pay well

Replace with "one finds fulfilling than one that pays well.

but is not

Should be "but it is not"

works that pay well, because money cannot buy happiness

Try "work that pays well; money cannot buy happiness"
OP undidiamaka 4 / 9  
Dec 6, 2012   #5
thanks i will do as you say, and i appreciate you idea!!
esarcosmos 4 / 10  
Dec 6, 2012   #6
Being happiness in the work....make it being happy

I believe that people work that well is always unhappy every time, because they don't have confidence in the life.
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check this line it's not correct.

hope i helped
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Dec 6, 2012   #7
I can see a few grammar mistakes.

Is it more important to do work that one finds fulfilling or work that pay well?

It is good to chose work that one finds fulfill than one that pay well, because when you're working where you relax, and fulfill even though they have to pay well.

This sentence is not clear enough. Fulfillment is not completely about relaxing.
I think it is better to find work that is fulfilling than one that pays well.

I agree with you. But it is important to maintain a delicate balance between them. Because in the modern world it is find to hard a job which is both fulfilling and that pays your rent.

But overall I think you have presented good facts.
OP undidiamaka 4 / 9  
Dec 6, 2012   #8
Thanks you for your correction, i appreciate


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