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What are the most important characteristics a public figure should possess?


isabellaclaudia 14 / 31  
Sep 2, 2011   #1
Throughout history, a few names stood out from the rest and became highly exalted even until today. They become role models, leaders, and guides in the murky landscape of life. Napoleon Bonaparte once said, 'a leader is a dealer of hope'. Therefore, people who become public figures have common characteristics which are essential to possess and make them become the inspiration of many others.. The looming question would be : what are these traits?

Firstly, a public figure must be passionate about what one preach and said. Henry Miller once said,'What distinguishes the majority of men from the few is their ability to act according to their beliefs'. Passionate people prove to be attractive to the masses as they are unyielding and determined in their cause. One can only admiration and respect for such a person. Therefore, public figures who has burning passion is often followed by many, in the hope of being imbued by the same passion. People continues to put their faith in them even though the path where they lead is daunting and uncertain to the extremes. 'Live your beliefs and you can turn the world around', indeed by being perseverance, change is bound to happen.

Being humble is also requisite for a public figure. as it has been said, 'A hero is no braver than an ordinary man, but he is brave for five minutes longer' A public figure is actually equivalent to his followers, mere humans. Therefore, one should not be arrogant and boast about one's fame or popularity. Instead, by putting oneself in others' shoe, one can better understands the plight of others and offers assistance and aid. For instance, Mother Teresa relinquished her status and wealth to safe the poor and downtrodden people in the streets.

amrosca 4 / 130  
Sep 2, 2011   #2
Hei Claudia! :D

I really liked the essay, there are however two things I'd change about it.
First of all, you are missing the conclusion at the end.
And second of all, I'd cut back on the quotes. They are pretty much all over the place and don't look so good in such a short essay. This is however just my opinion. :)

Good luck!

Napoleon Bonaparte once said: "A leader is a dealer of hope."

make them become the inspiration of many others. -- just one full stop here.

The looming question would be: what are these traits? -- there's no space needed before the colon.

Firstly, a public figure must be passionate about what onehe/she preaches and says .

Henry Miller once said:_" What distinguishes the majority of men from the few is their ability to act according to their beliefs."

they are ... determined inabout their cause.

One can only admire and respect for such a person.

public figures who hashave burning passion isare often followed by many, ...

People continue to put their faith in them even though the path where they leadwalk is daunting and uncertain to the extremes. " Live your beliefs and you can turn the world around." I ndeed by being perseverant , change is bound to happen.

A s it has been said: " A hero is no braver than an ordinary man, but he is brave for five minutes longer."

A public figure is actually equivalent to his followers, mere humans. -- I personally don't like how you describe the human here, because by saying "mere human" you show actually no regard for the human, however your essay revolves around how imposing some individuals can be. I'd cut that last apposition.

Instead, by putting oneself in others' shoes , one can better understands the plight of others and offers assistance and aid.

For instance, Mother Teresa relinquished her status and wealth to sav e the poor and downtrodden people in the streets.


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