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An important decision(hope someone revise it,thanks a lot)


dingqin 1 / 1  
Nov 10, 2013   #1
When I walked into the teacher's office, I saw there were many students standing in the office, with some pieces of paper on their hands. That day was the fifteenth day after the College Entrance Examination and it was the first day when we started to fill in the college application form. The purpose I went back to school was to ask advice of my English teacher, Mr. Zhang, who was my favorite teacher and friend. Due to my bad performance in the College Entrance Examination,

He told me:"You know, you are good at English, so my suggestion for you is to choose a professional school of foreign languages. Maybe you can be an English teacher one day. It's a good profession for most girls."

I came back home and talked with my parents about what my teacher had already said. I knew my mom extremely wanted me to be a doctor like my elder brother. To my great surprise, she made a compromise. She finally said: "I respect your choice." Later, I chose the Sichuan International Studies Universities. Fortunately, I was admitted. I was immersed in the ocean of a short history of British and American literature, enjoying the highlights of the Hollywood blockbusters and the beauty of English poems.

Nowadays, I have been to SISU for almost three years and I also gradually get used to the life here. Up to now, the decision of coming to SISU has had an important influence on me. I believe that I'm in right place.It's suitable for me.Perhaps, I don't know what the decision will bring me in the future, however, this decision has changed me a lot.

gabbie 9 / 19 3  
Nov 10, 2013   #2
ask advice of my English teacher

I think ask my English teacher's advice/ ask my English teacher for advice more accurate

in the ocean of

in an ocean of sth. However, it quite informal
OP dingqin 1 / 1  
Nov 10, 2013   #3
can you show me some details´╝č
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Nov 10, 2013   #4
The purpose I went back to school was to ask advice of my English teacher, Mr. Zhang, who was my favorite teacher and friend.

The purpose of my visit to school that day was to meet my favorite English teacher, Mr Zhang to seek his advice on ????? (tell on what you sought advice)

Due to my bad performance in the College Entrance Examination,
He told me:"You know, you are good at English, so my suggestion for you is to choose a professional school of foreign languages. Maybe you can be an English teacher one day. It's a good profession for most girls."

... was it an overall bad performance and hew was suggesting you to specialize in languages as an option to divert your stream to something you do better? That is not clear and you better give a bit more details about that.

I knew my mom extremely wanted me to be a doctor like my elder brother.

I knew my mom's wish was to see me being a doctor like my older brother. Or
I knew my mom was very keen on seeing me becoming a doctor like my older brother.


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