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It is impossible for a man to stay alone - groups are part of human's life


vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Aug 10, 2010   #1
Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

Nowadays every areas have organizations and groups. A group might be formed by small or large number of people but has a common interest or goal as an example group of manufacturing people, group of labor or group of religion. Groups are an important part of some people's lives. There are many reasons people like to join or stay with groups.

The main reason is human being like to form a society. As an simple example, everyone likes to stay with family and family is a one group, it might be small or large number of people. Second example is every person belongs to some religion, which we can say community and follow some rule and regulation. In society, different people stay together, some of them have good manners and some of them follows wrong ways like theft, murder. To constrain the bad manners and crime we need to form a community and establish some rules and regulations.

The second reason is humanity like to share experience and translate knowledge. Every person has an interest in some aspect. Some people like to art, some people like to physical activities. These interesting field's knowledge they like to share to other people. It can mostly possible when there is a group of common interest people as an example a group of camping people, a group of an engineer. That is why people form groups and translate their knowledge and experience with each other.

The third reason is getting success with working together. Groups are very important to people because many works can complete with groups only. In big organization, there are many small groups working together. As an example of manufacturing car, many groups involved in manufacturing car like a group of labors, a group of painters, a group of marketing peoples.

In conclusion, it is impossible to man to stay alone, group are part of human life. Human belongs many groups with knowingly and unknowingly. It helps people to spend their life with someone companion and share thoughts, knowledge and experience. Though some people like to stay alone because of their scare of dominant people and their discouragement but they are still belonging to some groups knowingly and unknowingly; they don't have other choice.

cathyliu 19 / 54  
Aug 10, 2010   #2
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every areas have organizations and groups.

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as an example

3.

The main reason is (human being) individuals like to ...
..., which can we ^can say community? and follow some ...
..., some of them are mankind ? and some of them ...
Itswe need to form acommunity and establish some rules and regulations for every one.

There are some confusing places.
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For example/instance, individuals usually enjoy staying with their families with whom they can share their happiness and sorrow no matter how large or small the size would be. Besides that, human are social animals. By establishing a community or society, people follow rules and regulations which bring others peace and wellbeing and constrain the bad manners or even crimes behaved by some individuals.
Zubaida 18 / 35  
Aug 10, 2010   #3
you nead to use (an) instead of (a) here:
but has a common interest or goal as an example group of manufacturing people
a group of common interest people as an example a group of camping people,
As an example of manufacturing car,

No space here. (everyone) is one word.
everyone likes to stay with family
...establish some rules and regulations for everyone .

your subject is plural, so no need to add (s) to the verb
In society, different people stays together, some of them are mankind and some of them follows wrong ways.
That is why people form groups and translate their

It's helpsIt helps people to spend their life with some

because of their scare of dominant people and their discouragement but still they are still belonging to some groups

I hope this will help.
Good Luck
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 11, 2010   #4
Let's talk about all and every.

All pencils are wooden.
All cars are on the road.
All of my money is in my pocket.

Every pencil is wooden.
Every car is on the road.
Every dollar is in my pocket.

When you use 'every' you have to be talking about something singular.
Every time you use every, make sure it refers to something singular.

When you use all, it refers to something plural:
All the oysters...
All the hamsters...
All the sentences that have "all" should be about something plural.

So... Vaishali, how should you change the first sentence of this essay?
OP vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Aug 11, 2010   #5
Thanks EF_Kevin

Really appreciated, you took good effort to explain important things.

I will change the first line as

Nowadays all areas have organizations and groups.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 13, 2010   #6
Wicked good.

:-)

To make a very strong essay, sum up the message of the whole essay by using a THESIS STATEMENT at the end of the first paragraph.

What thesis statement should you use at the end of the first paragraph? I think you should add this sentence to the end:

These reasons involve humans' desire to form a society, share knowledge, and work together.
OP vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Aug 14, 2010   #7
Thanks Kevin

Suggestion of THESIS STATEMENT, but I don't know what thesis statement should I write?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 14, 2010   #8
Nowadays every areas have organizations and groups. A group might be formed by small or large number of people but has a common interest or goal as an example group of manufacturing people, group of labor or group of religion. Groups are an important part of some people's lives. There are many reasons people like to join or stay with groups. These reasons involve humans' desire to form a society, share knowledge, and work together.

The main reason is human being like to form a ....

ABOVE, this shows how you can tell the reader EVERYTHING covered in your essay in a single sentence. That way, the reader will understand what you mean while reading the essay.

:-)
OP vaishali1980 26 / 83  
Aug 14, 2010   #9
oh ok

I thought that sentence we have to add last paragraph means in conclusion but now I got what you were telling me.

Thanks again.


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