I would like to give you some suggestions and comments,
of the world's population
"of" is not collocate with "improvement". what's more, you use "the improvement" to explain "world's population". I think it is inappropriate, because it will be necessary if you use boom, increasing, growth, or burst.
here is my hook example :Population burst has generated a mouthing concern across the world in recent decades.
the large number of world Subject Verb Agreement.
It should be : the large number of world populations
humanity have to face
humanity is an uncountable noun, so you cannot use a plural verb for such a noun. It should be = humanity has to face
continued rise of populationin the world is unplanned pregnant
you need an article for "population". What's more, "in" is not collocate with "population"
Therefore, it should be = ..continued rise of the population of the world is unplanned pregnant.
This case annually increase
Subject Verb Agreement, it should be = increases
unplanned program still becomeSubject Verb Agreement
, it should be = unplanned program still becomes or unplanned programs still become
that the crime rate in Makassar incline dramatically between 2010 and 2013 from 2500 to 3000 cases per year
I am afraid that this sentence is not easy to follow, so I suggest you to rewrite this sentence.
the number of unemploymentincrease annually
"the number" should be followed by singular verb.
has not be able to provide job for the unemployment
it should be = has not been able to provide a job
cases have to become issue of peoplecases have to become an issue / issues.
There are many grammatical errors in your writing, I suggest you to ask your friend first prior to upload your essay thus we can discuss about flows and ideas.
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