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(IELTS essay) inborn talents vs trained talents.


ash5005 10 / 16  
Jan 19, 2013   #1
It is generally believed that people are born with certain talents,for instance for sport or music,and others are not. However,it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is said that, some talents confined to an individual such as sports and music are innate. However, many people argue that, these talents can be earned by recurrent training. In this essay, i am going to state that talents in music and sports can be learned by training but inborn talents in music and sports make them perfect in these fields.

To begin with the argument about innate talents, especially in many sports persons and musicians. According to this aspect many individuals believe that all these forms of skills can only be achieved by genetically and there is no play of continual training. For instance, carnatic music is generally known as classical music, which is very hard to learn for everyone. However, some talented person learns it and becomes master in it without much trouble.

On the contrary, people can acquire some talents by taking lots of grooming.
Because practicing certain things for a long duration makes some people perfect in that concerned activity. For example some sportspersons become legengs in their respective events only because of their hardwork. In this case hard work plays bigger roles than inborn skills.

As far as i am concerned, eventhough some talents can be learned by cevere training or practice, it will not make a person perfect in it if the person does not have an inborn taste in it. These talents are only confined to some gifted people and it is their duty to make use of these skills.

elmar91 4 / 10 2  
Jan 19, 2013   #2
I think if you write like that it will be better than
Is known as some talents confined to an individual such as sports and music are innate
Lan archue - / 3  
Jan 19, 2013   #3
these talents can be earned by recurrent training

i think u have better replace earned by gained :)
Atalla 2 / 5 2  
Jan 19, 2013   #4
ash5005
can only be achieved by genetically, can only be achieved genetically

there is no play of continual training, there is no role of continual training
devabe2005 46 / 97  
Jan 19, 2013   #5
legengs in their -- spelling mistake i think typing mistake ===> legends in their

As far as i am concerned , eventhough some talents can be learned by c evere training ---> concerned means worried --> wrong usage--> better vocabulary needed in last para. cevere is spelling mistake i think typing mistake that is severe

last para will better if you start with like To conclude, In a nutshell,
In nutshell, by analyzing both the views, my opinion is that some talents can be learned by severe training or practice
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jan 19, 2013   #6
You need to improve your grammar and presentation.

According to this aspect many individuals believe that all these forms of skills can only be achieved by genetically and there is no play of continual training.

This sentence does not sound correct.
Some people believe that skills and talents should be in one's genes and training yourself without these inborn skills is a waste of time.

On the contrary, people can acquire some talents by taking lots of grooming.

This sentence also sounds incorrect. "Taking lots of grooming"????
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 19, 2013   #7
On the contrary, people can acquire some talents by taking lots of grooming.

On the contrary, people can acquire some talents through training.

For example some sportspersons become legengs in their respective events only because of their hardwork.

sports persons/ legends/ hard work
However, I wish you had picked some other career than sports for this example because for almost in every sport you need a certain inborn talent if you really want to become a sports legend. Why not you pick up a career which needs only basic skills such as a driver.


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