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Writing Task 1: incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transport


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Oct 16, 2017   #1
Q: The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.


types of transportation in numbers



The figure compares the number of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles traveled in 2002, separated by transportation type.

The highest numbers of incidents and injuries happened in demand response, which is 225 incidents and 173 injuries per 100 million PMT and the least is for commuter rail, with 20 incidents and 17 injuries per 100 PMT.

the other types of transportation were heavy rails, with 51 incidents and 35 injuries, Bus with 76 incident and 66 injuries, Light Rails with the same number of incidents, had fewer injuries (90), which makes it safer than bus for travel.

In conclusion, Commuter Rail with the lowest number of incidents was the safest choice, and Demand Response with the highest number of incidents is the most dangerous type of transportation.


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Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Oct 16, 2017   #2
FBG, I cannot continue assessing your essay at this point because your text did not meet the minimum 150 word requirement. You wrote only 130 words, which means this essay will get an automatic failing grade in an actual test setting. The reason that you did not meet the word requirement is because you have an inadequate overview presentation in your first paragraph. you do not identify the type of image provided, the types of transportation being analyzed, and how you are supposed to perform your analysis. All of your paragraphs are under the minimum 3 sentence requirement, which caused the essay to be shorter than it should actually be. It would have helped if you did not just keep presenting the information from the image without performing even a basic analysis of it. Had you tried to expand the analysis of the images by comparing the figures and finding similarities, the essay would have better fallen under the requisite guidelines. Hopefully, you will know how to better expand your analytical essay with your next practice test. I'll give you a pass with this essay and assume that you have no idea as to how to write one yet. I hope my observations and suggestions can help you to write a better practice essay next time.


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