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IELTS:To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns?


colin 23 / 48 15  
Dec 19, 2012   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns.

People have devastating effects on the ecosystem when increase productivity and boost the economy. While some people argue that environment problems is the price authorities have to pay for economic development, I believe that government should seek a balance between environmental conservation and economic development, for society will plunge into the disaster with ecosystem degrading and the loss of biodiversity.

Firstly, ecological degradation caused by human activities will pose a threat to our planet, if without proper regulation. We can expect more extreme weather conditions, when more carbon emissions, the culprit of the global warming, was produced considerably by thousands of power plants. The global warming will have a significant impact on our planet, with the polar ice caps melting and sea level rising due to the increasing temperature. In addition, the greenhouse effect will also cause a series chain of reactions ranging from flooding and droughts, with the government no regard to the environmental conservation.

Furthermore, it will lead to the extinction of many species of animals and plants, if government do not realize the importance of environment. Nowadays, the forest ecosystem are being destroyed at an alarming rate, with considerable loss of biodiversity. In fact, people have cut trees down in large numbers without a plan, which will wreak havoc on the wild animals. Without habitats to live in, the wildlife in a region will only able to live in cages. Moreover, the more land is tuned over to farmland, the more plants will be wiped out. The reduction in the number of species will be accelerating, if government still permit over-grazing activities in order to develop the economy

In reality, authorities are now able to maintain the ecological equilibrium, with the advance of science and technology. If the government encourage people to use renewable energy source, the consumption of coal, oil and gas can be reduced. Besides, government should condemn rather than condone environmentally inefficient manufactures. Harsh actions with the supervision system should be applied by the government, in order that the human activities will not bring about permanent devastation.

In conclusion, I strongly disagree that government do not pay attention to environmental issues simply because of developing the economy. Neither should the authorities neglect importance of ecological balance, nor should we ignore the responsibility of the government.
dumi 1 / 6924 1592  
Dec 20, 2012   #2
Good Introduction :)

People havecause devastating effects on the ecosystem whenin their attempts to increase productivity and boost the economy.

------------- you need these changes to align your opening statement with the prompt.

Firstly, ecological degradation caused by human activities will pose a threat to our planet, if without proper regulation.

.... first part of this flows beautifully. However, the highlighted part is a bit confusing :(
First, ecological degradation caused by human activities will pose a great threat to our planet if there is no porper regulation to control such activities.
OP colin 23 / 48 15  
Dec 20, 2012   #3
Dear Dumi, I really appreciate your suggestions which I will surely use as inspiration for my writing.

How do you feel about my conclusion. Could anyone kindly help me to modify the last paragraph?
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Dec 20, 2012   #4
Hai colin...

Nice essay..
Well organized..

I really like you introduction and conclusion...
Keep it up..
Tessy
dumi 1 / 6924 1592  
Dec 20, 2012   #5
How do you feel about my conclusion.

You always write well. So does your conclusion. Since this is an exam that has a great bearing on time, even this conclusion is sufficient. However, if you have a little more time you can expand it a little bit more to include a summation of what you said above. For example;

In conclusion, I strongly disagree that government should not pay attention to environmental issues simply because they need to concentrate on development of the country which is also an important aspect.If they ignore theecological balance, there would be disastrous consequences such as harsh weather conditions, extinction of species etc., that would pose a severe threat on the survival of our earth . Therefore, the authorities should neither neglect the importance of ecological balance, nor should they ignore the responsibility of the development.
jessy 1 / 1  
Jan 11, 2013   #6
problems is

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grammer mistake~!

really admire ur essay.
well developed and have a big vocabulary.


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