Aside from some grammatical problems that I will offer corrections for, I have to tell you that I admire the work you did on this essay. Your writing shows a clear understanding of the prompt and that you gave ample thought to the question being posed before you wrote the essay. I know this essay will be written under time constraint so let me assure you that the essence of the essay was clear even with the time constraint. Now for the grammatical corrections:
part of human societies .
- human
society .
I believe there are a few reasons although the are largely economic and education related.
- ...
the reasons are...
both violent and non-violent offence
- non-violent
offencesa great percentage of population does
- of
the population...
the poorest members of population often are without reliable income
- ... of
the population...
In response to this cause
job opportunities for the deprived
- for the
jobless .
Secondly, people without at least basic education can
-... without at least
a basic...
,it can be found that
-
shows that...
This way people would not suffer from the aforementioned problems and become contributing members of society.
- ... problems,
they can avoid committing crimes, and...
I hope you won't mind my grammatical suggestions which are highlighted in blue :-)