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An increasing number of transport revolutions. Which are considered as the most remarkable?

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May 21, 2018   #1

The most significant transportation innovation of the past 200 years?

In this information technology era, there is an increasing number of transport revolutions, but from my perspective, trains are considered the most remarkable transportation innovation over the past 2 centuries. The reasons of the statement will be discussed in this essay.

First of all, trains have become dramatically convenient to carry goods and people due to the large capacity and the reasonable price. To begin with, since horse-drawn carriages and cars seemed to lack space for freights and passengers, trains have sprung up to ease the problem. Thus, instead of bringing merely several people or under a ton of goods before, now a train is capable of carrying hundreds of passengers and tons of freights involved. Additionally, the cost of a train ticket is reasonably priced, which is much cheaper than that of other vehicles in terms of long-distance traveling. By this way, entrepreneurs are likely to save more financial funds for goods' carriage leading to economic growth.

Furthermore, the transportation may help to minimize the rate of traffic jams and decrease the time for traveling. In fact, the world population has increased rapidly, so train might be the key to an efficient way to reduce traffic jams' proportion. Specifically, the fewer people are using individual vehicles, the more road space there will be, resulting in reducing congestions risks. On the other hand, it is much faster for commuters to travel by trains. To make this point clear, through the history of upgrading steamed engine to electric engine, the speed of trains has been improved significantly, which is recorded at over 500 kilometers per hour at the present.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that the innovation of trains is of paramount importance because of its beneficial impacts on human beings.

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May 23, 2018   #2
Do, there is an error in your discussion. Since you are referring to transport innovation and not cargo transport innovation, you cannot discuss the train in the cargo transport manner. That is because cargo trucks are used for the commercial transport of goods. The trucks are far more efficient and capable than the train. Granted that the train was the preferred mode of transport in the late 19th to early 20th century, that is no longer the case these days. Cargo planes and trucks have taken over that role in the commercial transport industry. So that reason is wrong and weakened your discussion.

Your discussion about trains being an efficient alternative of mass transport is strong though and makes sense. Your samples and reasoning is sound except in the part where you said "On the other hand...". That phrase should have been omitted so that the sentence would have been more authoritative and supportive of the previous sentence.

You also failed to consider that not all rail transport systems in the world as modern as you imply in your essay. Other countries that are not capable of modern train transport systems suffer in comparison and thus, negate your opinion that the train is the most significant transportation innovation over the past 200 years. The airplane or cargo trucks would have made more sense in this discussion.

To strengthen an essay like this one, you need to pre-empt questions and possible counter arguments from those who have a different idea. Think of the opposition reasons I gave above and how you might have incorporated a defense statement in your essay paragraphs to weaken my arguments. That is called a pre-emptive discussion and often strengthens opinion essays that ask about topics as the one you indicated here.
OP lecongdoo3 1 / 1  
May 30, 2018   #3
Thanks. I highly appreciate your comment. I'll consider all what you said to write better essays.

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